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Open Poetry #8

Woe's Song Senryu

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2000-06-23 10:58 PM

~WOE'S SONG SENRYU~

5-7-5

Prisoner of woe
lonely whispers of love lost
all alone am I

*By Melissa Honeybee*

redheart angrybraids
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since 2000-04-16

Posts 410
honolulu, hawaii

1 posted 2000-06-23 11:06 PM

'woe to the sad ones
who cry only of
their own pain
and guilt.

this is not to you,
it was just a little spot i wrote along time ago, about a crazy love triangle,
your poem reminded me of it,
though,
i do like you short and simple spell,
they are usually my most favorite.
thank you for your words,
kindly,
redheart angrybraids

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

2 posted 2000-06-23 11:27 PM

Woe's Song Senyru

Howling to the sky~
Stars wink ignore earnest plea~
Full of woe am I

Melissa,

you probably know how much i enjoy your haiku/senyru....but moi think you have outdone yourself this time....this is in MHO the best senyru i have read from you....lovely three lttle lines that capture the agony of unrequited love....NICE!

the above senyru is for you since i like this so much...i must rack my brains to show my appreciation

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

3 posted 2000-06-24 09:22 PM

Thank you Redheart Angrybraids and Kaile, as always it's much appreciated

Usually, I try to write senryus that are uplifting and give hope or reveal some universal truth, but, I am in a dark place right now and this is the result.

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee

kaile

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since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

4 posted 2000-06-25 01:00 PM

bringing this up again with another woe senyru cos this is so good and deserves more comments

Aggressive Woe Senyru

Powerful woe waves~
Hurl on vulnerable dam~
It breaks; so do I

do hope more pp get to read this gem

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

5 posted 2000-06-25 02:12 PM

Thanks Kaile

And your senryu was a great addition!

Melissa

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