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Martie
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0 posted 2000-06-23 07:56 PM




  In the Place where Morning Dwells


In the place where morning dwells
you are the dew that touches flower
reflecting the color of butterfly wings
splendid and simple in healing power

You are the cliff on which I stand
in firm display that slowly changes
you hold me from the ocean’s swirl
you are the tender rock of ages

You are the laugh that opens new
and travels the path where lupine turn
you are the song within each breath
you are the nest a mother yearns

you are the desperate grasping climb
and the willow that bends in grace
beneath your branches is sweet repose
you are the breeze upon my face

My heart is the steeple where love abides
these hands till the earth to fragrant flower
the breath of the soil is peace to me
for you are the moon of midnight bower

In the grasp of a withered hand
in the sound of crying
through the agony and strife of life
you teach the art of dying

You are the still within my heart
you dream with me in surrender
in search for peace and love's display
you show me a magic blender

I can reflect upon your grace
for wherever I go I’m in your place

© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 2000-06-23 08:04 PM


Oh, Martie. I was so touched by this.

Elizabeth


I'm grabbing my hat and coat
I'm leaving the cat a note
Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town!



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2 posted 2000-06-23 08:22 PM


Martie~
Exquisite, dear friend.
Totally beautiful.
Your muse keeps great company with your heartfelt thoughts.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


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Denise
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3 posted 2000-06-23 08:37 PM


Beautifully done, Martie!  

Denise

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4 posted 2000-06-23 09:21 PM


you are the poet that writes with grace
your words 'ever put a smile on me face  

wonderous imagery here Martie-gator
you just do this time and time again
take care, jm

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2000-06-23 11:20 PM


So tender and touching Martie ...
beautiful imagery and gently flowing
sentiments ... a very lovely poem!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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6 posted 2000-06-23 11:29 PM


wooooooooooow...

where is that part:

You are the still within my heart
you dream with me in surrender
in search for peace and love's display
you show me a magic blender

wooooow

envying here...you get to do freeverse AND rhyme...

lol

another song of beauty Martie...

K

~Sleeping Beauty never knew how lucky she really was~ (Me)

RSEvans
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7 posted 2000-06-24 12:56 PM


beautiful Martie

Martie
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8 posted 2000-06-24 11:42 AM


Thank you all so much for your kind replies...I'm not very comfortable with rhyme, Kamla....I think I'll go back to free verse.  
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9 posted 2000-06-24 04:40 PM


you are the desperate grasping climb
and the willow that bends in grace
beneath your branches is sweet repose
you are the breeze upon my face

really really beautiful Martie.

A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral.
Antoine de Saint-Exupéry

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10 posted 2000-06-24 04:44 PM


I think this is really beautiful! Your descriptions are exquisitely lovely.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


PS Free verse is impossible for me!!


"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

Martie
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11 posted 2000-06-24 08:05 PM


Brian--thank you for the beautiful comment.

Lizzy--love and hugs back!

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12 posted 2000-06-24 10:16 PM


Martie.
This is a very good poem, and it was very touching.  I hope to see more of your work soon.

Erin

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13 posted 2000-06-24 10:28 PM


You work is an inspiration to us all, Martie, and I thank you for sharing it with us. This is poetry, most pristine.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


Elizabeth Santos
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14 posted 2000-06-24 10:34 PM


Martie,
I am spellbound by this piece
You are really something, my friend
Love
LIz

Lorraine Nisbet
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15 posted 2000-06-25 10:37 AM



Very touching and beautifully done, Martie!!

~Lorraine




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