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Traces Of Love Left Behind
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Traces Of Love Left Behind |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
What's left of me ... inside of you ... did I leave anything behind, am I a whisper in your heart ... a ghost of sweet regret in your mind. Did I leave a trace of contentment ... did I mend the hole in your heart, am I a secret that you keep ... a kind memory that love imparts. When you think of me ... does it bring a gentle smile to your face, do you cherish the love we shared ... is it held in a special place. Did I leave a lasting impression ... any footprints on your soul, did my love bring you peace ... did I complete and make you whole. When you cry late at night ... am I there in your tears reflection, did my love inspire you ... did I give your life direction. Will I always be inside of you ... a soft shadow, a treasured memory, will you look back on this love ... will this time be an echo of destiny. Did my love make you strong ... did it help you to see your own light, did my touch make you warm ... did my embrace comfort you in the night. Can you now see the beauty in you ... can you love yourself thru my eyes, can you accept fate's reasons ... walk the path to where love's future lies. All of these things you have left in me ... a thousand kisses on my heart, I hold on to the memories ... and cherish this love ... now that we're apart. Janet Marie for DeVante'...for all the traces left behind. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Janet~ you brought the house down with this one girl! i love all of your poems but some of them "hit home" harder for me than others. i was most moved by this piece and could feel it entirely! powerful, intense, and in only the way you can write...heartfelt! i stand in awe of you my dear friend! you show me what true inspiration can bring out in a person and everyday i learn something more from you. thank you. love ya, Amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Janet, This one is so sentimental, I can't tell how affected I am ...profound and emotionally charged it is... ........ All of these things you have left in me ... a thousand kisses on my heart, I hold on to the memories ... and cherish this love ... now that we're apart. ... Regards, sudhir |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Wonderfully written. Enjoyed muchly. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Janet, all the poems I have read about DeVante', are done with such love and this is no exception. Bravo. Parker |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
O my good ness did this ever make me cry I am addin gthis to my list!!! I just loved it. And of course you know this is something I can relate to on a very deep level!!! Thank you for this post!!! Great work here again!!!  Julie :) |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
All of these things you have left in me ... a thousand kisses on my heart, I hold on to the memories ... and cherish this love ... now that we're apart. wow...I am as always at a loss for words after reading your verses. What does one say to such beauty, such honesty, such tenderness and warmth. the only words I can muster are excellent followed by stunned silence... A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
OH my WOW! You've left me utterly in awe Janet Marie ... this is absolutely wonderful. I'd have to copy the whole poem to show you which lines struck me the most, for the whole poem hit me with such impact. I want to pick a favorite though, so this must be it ... "Did I leave a lasting impression ... any footprints on your soul," Incredibly wonderful poem Janet Marie ... I just loved it! Best wishes, /Kit |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh Janet...out of all your beautiful pieces to him, this one has touched me so deeply, I am crying. Girl, you sure know how to write what's in your heart and soul. If this guy doesn't feel/see that beauty, then I dare say he's really lost out. It's as if I wrote this poem myself....that's how well I relate. I think it's VERY important, that when someone touches us in our life here on earth, we should be sure to tell them, and let them know how they have impacted our lives. Twice now, very recently, I've been touched such as this, to the degree that I'm now actually relocating again to change my direction. I owe that all to these people in my life....One gave me hope, and the other gave me courage. And they both know how they have altered my life in a more positive direction. They will always have a special place in my heart, and they know that....I know I touched them too. You keep writing these beautiful fragments of your heart Jan....let him know. It's the sweetest memory I've ever seen from you. Take care while I'm away - I'll be in touch, you can count on that. Love you girl! Gennifer "Fantasies enrich our lives to the fullest, but true satisfaction comes from creating your own story in the real world! Live out your fantasies & make a storybook with beautiful pictures for the world to enjoy! -poetFemme |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Ohh J.M. You played my heart like a harp with this one "When you cry late at night...am I there in your tears reflection, Did my love inspire you...did I give your life direction" Excellent work, right from the heart, Thankyou Olias |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Awestruck I am. I am on my knees in a bow at your feet.( CUTE TOES  ). I believe I will learn alot now that I have found "Passions". You once again have moved me. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It is I who is awestruck and moved to tears ... when I read these replies. I had no idea this poem would evoke such emotion... and I am deeply touched by these replies and compliments. I guess I am just too close to the work to be able to look at it objectively. As Mark B. said in his reply there is so much to learn here from each other ... and I have grown so much in the light of this special place and from all your encouragement and inspiration. thank you to all here and to all who reply to this... with much respect , jm [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 06-23-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You KNOW by now, that I'm with you...this was so delicate and sweet and vulnerable and still somehow strong...and yep, the sun has gone down here...e me, you gotta friend in me...HUGS. |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautifully written, Janet Marie. Touchingly beautiful! Denise |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
JM, Wow....powerful poetry. This one really hits home for me. So moved by these words there are tears in my eyes. Just wonderful writing full of emotion and heart. Keep it up my friend. It is the only was for us to heal. Excellent work. LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hey sweet friend....Wonderful, wonderful heart light you have....!! and it shines big in this perfect piece... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ I really enjoyed this slice of your heart. Beautifully rendered, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 You have done your butterfly proud angel!!! This is so beautiful...I understand where these questions come from and how hard they were to ask...I've asked the same many times. Now a question sweet sister of mine....where the heck is that little vote box!!!!!! Do as I say not as I do....I see your game Love ya I do! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thank you my sweet friends... your words humble me, and touch me, truly. love ya all jm |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Bravo!! This is your best piece yet. Memories flood my mind of a love past. You wrote the questions of my heart so eloquently. Thank-you for sharing a piece of your heart too. kitkat |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
I think these are questions everyone who has ever been in love, then lost that love, asks themself at one time or another. I admire the way you can put words to all those feelings so well. Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Janet, How does one really ever get over a love felt as deeply as this? I don't think we have to get over it, in the end it does make us stronger! I can see how deep your feelings run for this man! It isn't everyday that we find a love so pure and honest! Here's to hoping you feel better! If you ever just need a friend to listen you can always email me or catch me on ICQ! Take care Sweet-poet Gator All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Oh my goodness!! This is so beautiful!! Your words have moved me so. You express it so wonderfully. Thank you for sharing this piece of your heart and soul. Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Janet, I can't begin to put words to this! Just a remarkable tempest of love. I'm in shock! To love someone so deeply that all that matters is that there is something of you left in the other person. Some mark, some 'footprints on your soul'. I shall close my mouth now, swallow and remember to breathe. This one will stay with me for a long time. Wow! Trew. I have been to see the world. Tasted life at every turn. And all the time your face came back to haunt me. -Chris DeBurgh |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thank you truly... i am SO touched by these amazing relpies to this poem... a poet is only as good as their inspiration and he is magic to my heart... thank you all. thank you my sweet Vante'for the gift of unending inspiration ... I love you, always ... my butterfly jm |
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