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Moving Day |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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Moving Day (Disintegration of a suthern belle) Squinting to see the road ahead Through tear blurred eyes Sensory overload, My soul screams and cries Each revolution of the tires Breaks my heart Leaving all I am behind, I'm ripped apart. Neatly packaged boxes Contain all I own But I left my love behind, Crated and alone An unworthy offering Is all it's ever been. It's one thing I will not need For I won't try again. Aching for what might have been Wondering what awful sin Dooms me to this agony... This wasn't what was 'sposed to be. A blue eyed baby's farewell kiss All my silly dreams of bliss Already memories In this dark abyss. I'm heading full speed towards despair No, wait - I'm there. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Suthern~ Great big *HUGS* sweetie. It seems that this aches. Guess we've all been on the road to despair and then we find a road on the map that takes us to happier places. *HUGS*, hon ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Breaks my heart Leaving all I am behind, I'm ripped apart. Neatly packaged boxes Contain all I own But I left my love behind, Crated and alone An unworthy offering Is all it's ever been. It's one thing I will not need For I won't try again. Aching for what might have been Wondering what awful sin Dooms me to this agony... This wasn't what was 'sposed to be. ------------------ this is SO SAD  S-girl you break me heart with this sad but beautifully expressed poem... so glad to see you posting again ... your words always move me and this one is no exception... make a sharp left and find a new road... drive towards the sun ... new horizons... take care jm |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Suthern..I ache for you sweetheart but I'm hoping that it's a road leading to smiles that will happen...at least that is what I wish for you MotherHen..  Big HUSG |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Suthern This is very moving... I'm heading full speed towards despair No, wait - I'm there. ... quite sad... well written... Regards, sudhir |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
'Twas very well written. Enjoyed the read. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
oh my gosh lady, the ending of this actually gave me chills, wish I could be there with you to make you smile, remember what lja used to tell me? "keep looking up"...don't look down (even though your despair writes incredible poems) look up |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
The road of despair is truly the road more traveled it seems...i empathize with your lost and wandering feeling,,, the right road is there you know! nicely written jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you for your kind comments. Opening PIP was far more comforting than the "welcome packet" that was waiting on my counter... even if I don't comment much for a while, I appreciate you all... very much! I can't say I'm feeling much better yet... for the only one who even gives Toe any competition for my affections is just 20 months old... Now I'm far away from both and miss them with every breath. *S* And we've noted before that I'm a shadow... but with no one to follow, a shadow has no substance, no reason for existence. *S* By the way... "hell" and "move" are synonymous to a packrat! LOL Marge: Thanks for the hugs... and if you have a copy of that map, please FedEx it to me immediately! *G* Janet Marie: My heart resides in the east... so I'd love to drive towards the morning sun! *G* Thank you... Sudhir, Mike, and Prometheus: Thank you! My thoughts have been so jumbled lately I don't make sense to myself... your "well written" is appreciated! Little Chick: What can I say but I love you... for I do! HUGS! Corazon: But if I look up, I trip over boxes? (puzzled look) And I already have so many bruises that people look at me strangely... I just tell them my belongings won the fight! *G* I love you, gal... Y'all take care... and thanks for putting up with my moaning. I promise I won't wallow forever. *G* |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
 Moving and hell are one in the same! For someone who's moved an awful lot I can definitely relate! Though it may not be for the same reasons.Hon, we all wallow, and that's alright. We're with ya! How many times I cried when moving, it's just really hard on me. I'm one who gets used to it and then hates to change it. I survived them, you will too. Maybe it's for the better. Big hugs to you Suthern! You almost got me in tears here... Love ya! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah suthern, you need to join PdV's "pity party" but I forget which Forum she put it in! Probably in the Alley! Hugs to you, little one! I've moved many times, there is both heart ache and heart dance to be found! Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
*sigh* wunnderful poem m'dear... I am moving Friday...god! I have decided to do it in stages...we are more than fortunate to be moving only 3 miles from home...but we get the wonderful opportunity..to move twice in 3 weeks..first our home, second our business.. YIKES! ~H |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Awww Suthern  I hope your pain lessens with each mile you take along life's road.Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Darnit, Suthern girl, I was so happy to see your name and now so sad that you're going through so much. I don't know why it is that the worst things always happen to the best people but I feel for you. Life does have strange twists and turns, though. Don't give up....for what little it matters, you've got US! I would love some day to experience the love you have felt and given...... In order to keep a true perspective of one's importance, everyone should have a dog that will worship him and a cat that will ignore him. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Suthern--heart tears in this one well written poem...sending hugs to help maybe just a little...and I'm glad to see you! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
You wallow as much as you like and just when you like or even need to cause what else are friends for but to help make a tiny smile or let it be known that if distance was no object then hugs would be plentiful... I worry about you so was pleased to see this post tonight, I know it's not much fun rebuilding a life and in a strange place as well and new job but that little determined spirit in me says: ok, it's a new place so no one knows my bad habits; it's a new job so I can be the best that ever at bringing in results; it's a new hovel so I can make it a small palace and best of all - I still have my friends that know the real me, the person who cries and defends you and loves you...ooops, are you clucking?.. Sweet dreams MotherHen HUSG |
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