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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2000-06-22 10:45 PM


     Please beam me up

She moves me with a gravity,
Like the phases of the moon.
Raining reign invisibly,
In the highest of high noon.

Bathing me in speaking coo,
Toweling me with words of grace.
Embracing me in peaks anew,
And holding me oblique in space.        

In heavens name allow me birth,
Please bring me to conclusion.
In heavens name come down to earth,
I cannot love illusion.

I would you change the Goddess cup,
Allow the flavors, touch and feel
Either that or beam me up,
You play me like a glockenspiel.

I could domain on common love,          
If you would be my ladylove.


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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-06-22 11:03 PM


In heavens name allow me birth,
Please bring me to conclusion.
In heavens name come down to earth,
I cannot love illusion.

I would you change the Goddess cup,
Allow the flavors, touch and feel
Either that or beam me up,
You play me like a glockenspiel.

I could domain on common love,          
If you would be my ladylove.

------------------

OH MAN!!!!!!!!!!!
now Im like melted butter
wow Sy guy...WOW

"She moves me with a gravity,
Like the phases of the moon.
Raining reign invisibly,
In the highest of high noon."

WOW...may the force be with you  
she must be a goddess to evoke this kind of grace.
later-make-me swoon-gator
jm

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2 posted 2000-06-22 11:20 PM


Always have liked this one, Sy, and still do....
Mike
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3 posted 2000-06-23 12:22 PM


Yep.. 'tis a keeper.  Well written.
Elizabeth Santos
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4 posted 2000-06-23 12:34 PM


Tis you who must come down to earth
In order to gain second birth
And then without your interrupt
I'm sure that she will beam you up.
You do have a way with words.
Love
Liz

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2000-06-23 05:25 AM


Wonderful flowing poetry...
"You play me like a glokenspiel.
I could domain on common love
if you would be my ladylove."
Oh yes, I loved these lines.   James

Sudhir Iyer
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6 posted 2000-06-23 07:50 AM


Well, Seymour, let me me honest, when I first read the title, I thought beign just back from vacation, you are into adventure mood and writing like BEAM ME UP SCOTTY or something similar, but then...

what I found was most beautiful...

I could domain on common love,          
If you would be my ladylove.

wow!

regards, sudhir

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2000-06-23 08:06 AM


Seymour~
Well, someone needs to 'beam you up' to
SUBMIT FOR BOOK !  
Come on ... it's easy !
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Christopher J
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8 posted 2000-06-23 08:22 AM


I don't know...what can't I say?...this is GREAT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2000-06-23 07:10 PM


Janet,
The force is surely with you, gator gal.

Balladeer,
Thanks and I'll see you soon.

Mike,
Thanks, I'll keep it.

Elizabeth,
And you do have a way with thoughts. Love Sy

Jmlee,
Big thanks James.

Sudhir,
Nice comments, thanks for the WOW.

Marge,
How many times do I have to say I love you too.

Chris,
I think what you said was great.

Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

10 posted 2000-06-23 07:24 PM


Seymour, it certainly isn't every day that one happens upon a classic piece of writing...this must indeed be such a day for me. This is pure poetic finery, dear sir.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


doreen peri
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11 posted 2000-06-23 07:35 PM


Wow! What a topic!!! I could certainly envision this!!

Well done, Sy. Very well written verse with a message that cuts hard.

Kit McCallum
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12 posted 2000-06-23 07:39 PM


"I would you change the Goddess cup,
Allow the flavors, touch and feel
Either that or beam me up,
You play me like a glockenspiel."

I just loved this Seymour! So eloquently written and flows so beautifully ... really well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Martie
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13 posted 2000-06-23 07:59 PM


Sy, you always make wonderful writing seem so easy...I love this poem!
Denise
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14 posted 2000-06-23 08:49 PM


Beautifully written, Sy!  

Denise

Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 2000-06-24 05:22 PM


Meadowmuse,
Sorry it took so long to thank you for the wonderful comment. *L*

Doreen,
Since you are one of my favorites your comment means alot.

Kit,
Thank you so much for the well done.

Martie,
That goes both ways. *L*

Denise,
Thank you sweet. *L*

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