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Colin
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since 1999-06-05
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Callington, Cornwall, England

0 posted 2000-06-22 05:33 PM


A sleepy fur-clad caveman
Crawls slowly from his bed,
rising wearily,
opening deep set eyes.
standing,
stooping,
sighing,
taking his club
(in other words, his cross stick) in hand
carefully stalks his pray
killing for his dinner.


Dunno if I like this or not, but I had another silly idea and went for it  

Eric.< !signature-->

"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.


[This message has been edited by Eric Williams (edited 06-22-2000).]

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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2000-06-22 06:04 PM


Well I like it Eric!  It's a neat idea, not easily accomplished, and you made it look so easy ... well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

X Angel
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since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
Oregon
2 posted 2000-06-22 06:16 PM


geez Eric!
I could NEVER do this in a million years!

awesome job
~H

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

3 posted 2000-06-22 06:47 PM


Even with dinner being freshly clubbed, I thought this was cute and very clever!  I enjoyed...
Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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4 posted 2000-06-22 08:38 PM


Yes, very clever, Eric!  

Denise

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