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Meadowmuse
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0 posted 2000-06-22 01:12 AM



Within Your Eyes



Gentle captor, hear my plea
Your eyes, your voice, imprison me
Awaken stirrings from in my soul
to be held by you, my sweetest goal

Your gaze induces mine to dream
Your eyes entice this conscious stream
to flow and ebb, with soft surround
in pools of hazel, I dearly drown

For in your eyes I clearly see
a wish fulfilled with honesty
and tender, trusting, solemn sighs
are mirrored, love, within your eyes

~ Claire




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Dark Angel
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1 posted 2000-06-22 01:23 AM


O Claire this made me melt... it is sooooo beautiful I loved every line... Excellent writing!  

My grief lies onward and my joy behind
(Shakespeare)

Martie
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2 posted 2000-06-22 01:24 AM


Claire--so beautiful!  Your writing always is so perfectly expressed and captivating.
Christopher
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3 posted 2000-06-22 01:48 AM


"Melt..." Yes, I think she's right... that is exactly the effect this had.
Sigh.

Alwye
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4 posted 2000-06-22 01:48 AM


Claire, this is so beautiful...I love looking into my love's eyes...although they are blue, not hazel..gorgeous work, it's so wonderful to have you around again!  

*Krista Knutson*

"Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~


"We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~

Eloise
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5 posted 2000-06-22 02:51 AM


A definite keeper Claire.  This is beautiful.  
tracie66
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6 posted 2000-06-22 03:55 AM


This is soo beautiful Claire..the flow wonderful and you've done a terrific job here  
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



Mark Bohannan
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7 posted 2000-06-22 07:50 AM


Ahh...yes, the eyes.  The passage to the soul and the light of all life.  Great feeling in this one.  Love the way it flows.
Meadowmuse
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8 posted 2000-06-22 09:20 AM


Dark Angel, Martie, Chris, Krista, Eloise, Tracie, and Mark...thanks to each of you, in earnest, for reading and taking time to let me know you enjoyed this little piece. I wrote it in response to a poetry group challenge, to use simply "Your Eyes" as the theme of the poem. Thanks again for such kind words this morning.  

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


Honeybee
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9 posted 2002-03-11 11:17 PM



Simply gorgeous...I love the way you write!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

passing shadows
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10 posted 2003-01-06 04:12 AM


eyes do that for me too!
LadySofia
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11 posted 2003-01-27 06:40 PM


Oh dear muse! What sweet reverie is this? Captivating...
Awakens a time in my mind I had long since forgotten...

CocoBaci
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12 posted 2003-02-23 10:24 PM


MeadowMuse, I sure do enjoy reading your poetry and if I have to dig back to bring these jewels back up then so be it...
Smiles2uPoetFriend
*~coco~*

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13 posted 2003-11-25 01:28 AM


DearestPoetess~
Though you are no longer here, I hope that someday you will return to see what we admirers think of your beautiful poetry~

I miss you, Claire~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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