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Missed Mist

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Dark Angel
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0 posted 06-21-2000 02:36 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Angel

                    
Ah rain.....
   droplets from heaven
      softly-stroking
      the dry-crumbling
           earth of my
       soul

captured and stored
   within the fragile
       beaker
        of my heart

  but rain

   disappears
     moisture-lost
evaporating into the
thin air
      becoming mist

      mist
       the mystery
    within my soul
it hovers over
          and around
   the seasons of my heart

       you
     are not rain
    but the mist

that I have missed


Angel of Darkness
June 2000


My grief lies onward and my joy behind
(Shakespeare)
© Copyright 2000 Dark Angel - All Rights Reserved
Jeremiah Johnson
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1 posted 06-21-2000 02:55 AM       View Profile for Jeremiah Johnson   Email Jeremiah Johnson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jeremiah Johnson

i love this imagery and the style you use here i'll hav eto read more of your work. good job keep it up right here.

I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul


Dark Angel
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2 posted 06-21-2000 07:51 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Thank you Jeremiah, for your sweet reply  

My grief lies onward and my joy behind
(Shakespeare)
Sudhir Iyer
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3 posted 06-21-2000 08:04 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

ah rain,
you drench
  many a scorched soul,
mend
many a broken
  heart's pain,
soon with little
sunshine patch,
  you move away
  becoming pleasant
mist

mist is
as whom,
   you stay back  
reminding me of
  jolly yesterdays
cool saturdays,
pleasing each day....
.....

O, Angel of darkness, you have penned a very good poem here, so vivid in images, and so pleasing to this eye to read ...

regards, sudhir.

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-21-2000).]
Jan
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4 posted 06-21-2000 08:41 AM       View Profile for Jan   Email Jan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jan

Wonderful imagery and a great read!
Mike
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5 posted 06-21-2000 10:13 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

nicely written... enjoyed the poem.
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6 posted 06-21-2000 10:16 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

DA~ very,very cool!   -SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB


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7 posted 06-21-2000 05:04 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

So lovely! I like your play on words too!!!  
Butterflies_dont_cry
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8 posted 06-21-2000 06:11 PM       View Profile for Butterflies_dont_cry   Email Butterflies_dont_cry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Butterflies_dont_cry

This piece has an awesome "feel" to it, the
imagery was great!  Thank you for sharing
this~
JulieAnn
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9 posted 06-21-2000 06:18 PM       View Profile for JulieAnn   Email JulieAnn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JulieAnn

nice imagry...I liked it much,,,GREAT work.  

Julie :)


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10 posted 06-21-2000 07:55 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

AngelGirl !
This is just beautiful !
Not 'dark' ... just 'mist'-ifying !

'captured and stored
   within the fragile
       beaker
        of my heart'

~*Marge*~




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Dark Angel
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11 posted 06-22-2000 01:19 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Sudhir thank you for your beautiful poetic reply   Thanks for taking the time to read, I do appreciate it so.  

Jan Thank you again, glad you liked  

Mike, glad you enjoyed it, thank you  

Sea, thanks for your very very kewl reply  

Sharon, Thanks again hon *hugs*

BDC, Thanks for your lovely reply and it has been a pleasure to share.  

JulieAnn, Thank you I am glad you liked it. )

Marge, Thank you for your always lovely replies  
Glad you found it "Mist"-ifying  


My grief lies onward and my joy behind
(Shakespeare)
Jamie
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12 posted 06-27-2000 06:40 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

Dark Angel,

I have spent a few hours today reading your poetry. Most all I have read is outstanding.
In the relatively short time span of these works, I have noticed marked improvement in your ability to deftly stroke your words into pictures. This one I think one of the best so I brought it back. Hope you don't mind......jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


Martie
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13 posted 06-27-2000 08:59 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

She doesn't mind, do you Dark Angel, 'cause now I have read it also...and really enjoyed the read.  

[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 06-27-2000).]
WhtDove
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14 posted 06-27-2000 09:47 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Angel I think you described how I had been feeling this past while. 'The dry crumbling earth of my soul...you've described it perfectly! Well written my dear. Love the imagery  
SpitFire
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15 posted 06-27-2000 11:23 PM       View Profile for SpitFire   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SpitFire

~Aahhh,...*Sigh*. I love the way you write.  This is so soft and airy and just reads wonderfully. It is beauty. *Peace.
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awesome read
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