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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Dream till you cannot The night stars will be your guide. This is your best dream Comments and criticism welcome! "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying." Harry Anderson, "Night Court" *Cassandra Roseen* |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
DE~ I don't know much about haiku's, but this one is beautiful, I really like it!  -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
oooh....*takes deep breath* A truly beautiful haiku Cassers. And very well done with what I know about them. The stars are very becoming to you, methinks. *Krista Knutson* "Cherish your vision; Cherish your ideals; Cherish the music that stirs in your heart, the beauty that forms in your mind, the loveliness that drapes your purest thoughts. If you remain true to them, your world will at last be built." ~James Allen~ "We've made houses for hatred...it's time we made a place where people's souls may be seen and made safe"...~Jewel~ |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
I like this one much Cassers! Dreaming is the only way to go (looky at my quote, LOL), and I agree with the stars being your guide, a humble honest light, shining down through millenia and miles... Beautiful! Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Dear DE,cool sentiments here...if i may offer some suggestions: try not to use words like "the", "this is" as these are passive terms and tell the reader nothing...use active verbs...run,walk,happy,fabulous,furious just to name a few hence my revision: Dream till you cannot~ Bright night your faithful guide~ Treasure your best dream hope i helped |
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