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Tennessee Angel
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0 posted 2000-06-20 10:14 PM


Time

He stares out of the window,
but he doesn't really see.
He remembers the days
when he was wild and free.

In his mind, it is not spring.
In his eyes, he is lost.
On his face, there is no smile.
On his heart, there is frost.

He sits in a chair
as life slowly passes by.
The only sound you will hear
is a sorrowful sigh.

His bones are weak.
His body is cold.
Time has gone...
and made him old.


--You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.--

© Copyright 2000 Stacy - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 2000-06-20 10:20 PM


Don't know what I can say, except well done. Thank you for posting this, Tenessee Angel.

Elizabeth


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I'm leaving the cat a note
Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town!



Butterflies_dont_cry
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2 posted 2000-06-20 10:24 PM


TA*
This is a touching piece, I had a vision
of my grandfather while I read this, he died
a mere shadow of his former self, so sad to
watch someone so strong fade.  You are on
a roll girl!  Thank you once again for
sharing your gift of weave~

Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2000-06-21 07:12 AM


TennesseeAngel~
Such a sweet, yet sad, recall.
Well done, hon.
~*Marge*~


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Jan
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4 posted 2000-06-21 08:56 AM


WOW, This is really well written.  I will definately be looking for more of your work.
Sudhir Iyer
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5 posted 2000-06-21 09:11 AM


Tennessee Angel,
This is a sad, but delicately written piece...liked the writing...

regards, sudhir

Mike
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6 posted 2000-06-21 10:06 AM


Nicely written Angel.  I enjoyed your poem.
Tennessee Angel
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7 posted 2000-06-21 07:56 PM


Thank you everyone for your kind remarks.  Everyone here has been so welcoming and so supportive.  It is so nice to have a place where so many people understand this uncontrollable urge I have to write.  

And it's nice to have people like you, Marge, that understand that the urge usually hits when the rest of the world is asleep.

Thank you all!!!!!

--You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.--

Lone Wolf
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8 posted 2000-06-21 11:53 PM


TA,

So sad and touching.  Reminds me of my grandfather when he died.  Had alzheimer's and didn;t even know any of us.  Brought tears to me eyes just reading this.  Very sweet.  Great writing.  

LW


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--Michael W. Smith


tracie66
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9 posted 2000-06-22 04:22 AM


TA~
Tender writings
sad and touching piece
well written
Tracie~


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It is the harmony of the universe



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