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whiskey
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0 posted 2000-06-20 10:03 PM


" The Night you Left "

Sirens sound
All around
Clock ticks
So very loud
You lay in pain
On my legs
Help is needed
Not found
I see you slip
Your eyes they roll
No longer conscious
I speak to you
You cannot hear
A tear I cry
I feel you drift
Away from this world
My grip Is lost
A knock at the door
Bursting through
Sirens so loud
Unheard to me
My love is gone
My friend is no more
You lay in sweat
Upon the floor
Why couldnt you tell
Did you not trust
My friend you are
Alive and in death
Never will I forget
That growling Night
That night that you
Left this life
A scream I sounded
When confirmed to me
A cry full of pain
Now left just memory
Of  a friend
The best I knew
Every year
I shed a tear
As I sit next to your grave
I talk to you
Do you hear
The life I tell you of
My friend I miss
My heart is lost
Without you here
I miss you

© Copyright 2000 Julie Nelson - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth
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1 posted 2000-06-20 10:11 PM


How sad, Whiskey. I am so sorry for the loss of your friend, and I felt such hurt while reading this.

Elizabeth


I'm grabbing my hat and coat
I'm leaving the cat a note
Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town!



whiskey
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2 posted 2000-06-21 02:14 AM


Thankyou Elizabeth  For reading and your kind words
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3 posted 2000-06-21 04:00 PM


I'm sorry you had to endure this heartbreak.  I hope your heart is soothed by writing this beautiful poetry and healing will embrace you.   James
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4 posted 2000-06-21 04:04 PM


Whiskey~ this is terribly sad, I can't imagine how it must hurt you.....   -SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB



Sudhir Iyer
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5 posted 2000-06-21 04:07 PM


I am saddened by your loss, Whiskey...and very moved for these devotional sentiments that you express...

Every year
I shed a tear
As I sit next to your grave
I talk to you
Do you hear
The life I tell you of
My friend I miss
My heart is lost
Without you here
I miss you

....

regards and take care,
sudhir

vandana
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6 posted 2000-06-21 07:46 PM


I liked it a lot!!!!!
Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2000-06-21 08:03 PM


Whiskey~
*Hugs*, sweetie.
~*Marge*~


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miriam
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8 posted 2000-06-22 01:54 AM


just think of it this way whiskey..your friend is looking at you from above...do you really think he/she wants to see you sad?
tracie66
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9 posted 2000-06-22 04:26 AM


Whiskey~
This is soo terribly sad
you must be missing your friend dreadfully
Hugs
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe



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