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Brother Robert
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Brother Robert |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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I cursed the heavy load I swear a wild ride gone bad, inside somewhere I judge unfair the feelings I've unclad. My five brothers cast like one no less at shunning me, with righteousness wished me done confessions made in heat. Inclement tales of me they'd tell, ungodly prophecies they preached from their storage surplus swelled uncaring prodigies they'd speak. Beyond existence nature's time ends suddenly with sleep rolling past those worthy minds not noticing how brief. Through a vine I hear toll bells dear Lord I'm feeling grief from this drunken chambered hell their blood stirs deep in me. Through grace of grief my brother Brian gives me a message brief he speaks of Robert soon to die and he's requesting me. My heart cried out sick afraid "Robert please don't die I'll be home within the day before the darkness takes the light. The distant way was like a dream, like the wind I did drive. Along the road the evergreens seemed waving on my flight. My heart and soul were blurred, my eyes filled up with gems and all the distance I'd incurred I prayed he would forgive. In the setting sun I felt a stir, a calm and cooling breeze, on the porch by the banister sat Robert ill at ease. His eyes filled with helpless pain, he forced a smile to face, outstretched arms he held my way we smothered in embrace. " Oh Daniel how you ease this pain take hold your brother's love and to God I pray our gain for the waste we've overcome." In my arms he was released, my tears poured like Spring rain and as I crushed him to my breast his soul ran through my veins. Filled with selfish gain I'd missed self serving at great cost the wonderments of his gifts I suffered with his loss. These days, Robert passed along I keep gazing at the stars, we're seen as brothers six less one but I know five plus one we are. Celtrue2000@E3B1G9 |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
How wonderful that you were able to patch things up before it was too late. The last verse is so nice! Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Oh, this was wonderful, ethome! So touching. I thought I was going to cry. You had my attention from beginning to end. Great work!  --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
In my arms he was released, my tears poured like Spring rain and as I crushed him to my breast his soul ran through my veins. Filled with selfish gain I'd missed self serving at great cost the wonderments of his gifts I suffered with his loss. These days, Robert passed along I keep gazing at the stars, we're seen as brothers six less one but I know five plus one we are. ------------------ ethom this is perfect... they rhyme is like butter but its the amazing emotions and story you shared here that shines... i felt this poem.. thank you jm |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Elizabeth, Tennessee Angel and Janet Marie. I appreciate your comments. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Oh this is superb! An outstanding story poem, and written with such candor, respect and grace. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Meadowmuse I appreciate your kind words. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ I read this last evening and was overcome with tears at the remembrance of a brother gone. I re-read this morning and felt the same emotion ... Very moving, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank-you Marge, I am so sorry to hear about your brother, it's always such a shock and so traumatic an experience. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ethome, have I told you how much I like your work? Now, I have a brother, Robert...I think it is time for yet another email... Hugs, m'friend, and thank you... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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compassion Member
since 2000-11-01
Posts 135USA |
touching.. I thought I detected childhood spirituality...the kind that will endure when it seems we can't. Good write. Sad but you know Robert is living, thats a fact. Marcy |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Outstanding...the last four lines contain so much hope and understanding...James |
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TexUS Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228 |
Very, very poignant...I FELT every word. * * * * * * Well done. |
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