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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 2000-06-20 04:20 PM


A butterfly inspires more than a single thought...


Butterfly Thoughts - II

Born into a cocoon, bound tight,
Gaining wings, a caterpillar's free,
Lively with frolic, full of flight,
As she undertakes life's decree.

She flies high without any end in sight,
Bright coloured wings assist her flight,
Sees the world in shades of grey,
A fluttering soul guides the way.

Fasting, she had been within her shell,
Solitarily confined, in the dark cocoon,
After two weeks in the gloomy well,
Freedom now gained, a well-earned boon.

In flight, she has become her own,
Into the wide world she has flown.


[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 06-21-2000).]

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2000-06-20 04:34 PM


Never has metamorphosis been so lovely as in your poems...

Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-06-20 04:57 PM


pt2-- is as lovely as one..
excellent imagery
jm


Sudhir Iyer
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3 posted 2000-06-20 05:15 PM


and I have never felt so honoured before...thanks Karilea, thanks a lot... learnt a lot over here, its been some month for me so far with all these beautiful thoughts conjuring themselves...

Janet,
Thanks for your very kind words...as lovely as...you... thanks again.

Nate Dogg
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Georgia, Fulton
4 posted 2000-06-20 05:47 PM


This is very beautiful, Sudhir! I was going to do a poem called The Metamorphosis and it was also going to be about a butterfly but it's no need to know because mine won't stand a chance against yours...ha,ha.

Nathan

brian madden
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5 posted 2000-06-20 05:51 PM


Born into a cocoon, bound tight,
Gaining wings, a worm becomes free,
Lively with frolic, full of flight,
As she undertakes life's decree.

Fasting, she had been within her shell,
Solitarily confined, in the dark cocoon,
After two weeks in the gloomy well,
Freedom now gained, a well-earned boon.

This series is getting more beautiful, more please. wonderfully written.

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A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral.
Antoine de Saint-Exupéry


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Sudhir Iyer
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6 posted 2000-06-20 11:49 PM


Nate,
I think you should in fact write The Metamorphosis. Each writer/poet has his/her own perspective and it has to be explored to see, the depth of the sea....and the roughness of the waters....So please go ahead and write... I would always think it will be much better than this one...So please try, I will be waiting to read your poem...

by the way, thanks for reading and for the highest compliments offered  
regards, sudhir.

Sudhir Iyer
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7 posted 2000-06-20 11:50 PM


Brian,
If you wish for more, you will have it... and thanks for the 'wonderful' comment...


regards, sudhir

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