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Sunshine
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0 posted 06-20-2000 03:45 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

When you Write with Love

When I awoke this morn, I looked around ~
and what broke my heart, was the silent sound
of no one breathing, and no heart’s beat ~
there lay a note…my heartbreak…complete.

While the missive I read gave my eyes a sting,
there wrapped in the note, lay her ring,
and without reading the letter, word for word,
I knew it was full of the feelings I’d heard.

She doesn’t belong here anymore,
her heart now lies on another’s shore,
for he spoke to her in cadence so fine
now her heart is no longer mine.

He used expression with karmic song
and thus asked her to sing along,
took her heartstrings, plucked them well
so no longer will she be compelled

to listen to my words, or hear my voice,
I’ve lost her by my very own choice,
to not hear her, nor her words of love,
she’d packed her things, flew like a dove...

She doesn’t live here anymore,
she’s flown off for other shores,
and only lingering traces of her kiss
will I feel from the cool dawn’s mist.

He drew poetic pictures, and lured her in
and thus their soul’s dance did begin,
he took her love, which once was mine
impressed upon her, and his words entwined,

and he spoke of things she must have missed,
for he sealed his messages with love and a kiss,
he promised her the moon, under starred sky,
he would sip wine while he gazed in her eyes,

and so intoxicated she must have become,
that in my silence, to him she’s run,
and I cannot blame her any more,
that she’s run off for distant shores.

When I awoke this morn and looked around
what broke my heart was that silent sound
there is no one breathing, no heart’s beat ~
here laid the note…now my heartbreak’s…complete.


20 June 2000
©KRJ



Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~



[This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 06-20-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Karilea Rilling - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 06-20-2000 03:55 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

read it twice now, and liked words even better...

When I awoke this morn and looked around
what broke my heart was that silent sound
there is no one breathing, no heart’s beat ~
here laid the note…now my heartbreak’s…complete.
....

so sad....
woke up in the morn, looked at the empty room,
with broken heart, and misery-laden feet,
I walk slowly through figureless shadows loom,
I feel the gloom settling, loss of hope complete...

so agonising, so touching, very well written...

Karilea, I offer my regards,
Sudhir
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2 posted 06-20-2000 03:59 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I liked this so much, I know I double-posted, one for the book in Voices, the other here, for everyone's pleasure [I hope others like it...]

but that you read it twice, and added some to it, pleases me even more!  Thank you, Sudhir!

Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

Sudhir Iyer
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3 posted 06-20-2000 04:02 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

pleasure is all mine...
by the way, I am in a butterfly mood today...you know what I mean, in flight, fluttering around...  
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4 posted 06-20-2000 04:04 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Flit away, my friend...glad you have the time to benefit from all of the treasures that lay at your feet...

Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

Justbleu
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5 posted 06-21-2000 02:08 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

I think I should have been able to vote on this one!!!    Very sad, and a very very good piece!!  Enjoyed the read tremendously!!
Thank You Sunshine!!

Bridgette


"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown
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6 posted 06-21-2000 02:21 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

JustBleu, feel free to go to Voices, I've marked it for publishing there...if chosen...

normally I do not double post...I didn't know if the regulars at Open would go there to see this or not...

it is quickly becoming a favorite of mine and I wanted to share it with my friends...

thank you for your kind comments...

Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

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Dear Sunshine
This is poetry. This could not have happened to you. Your words are extraordinary in that you give a new expression to the meaning of love - recognising the Rival - hitherto ignored by any lover. An object of scorn for any jilted lover has been sanctified by you - I offer tributes to your excellence - you are a true lover and a poet par excellence.
Deepak Menon

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8 posted 06-30-2000 09:09 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Deepak, what kind comments...thank you so much.  May I offer my WELCOME to Passions in the hope that you will stay long and interact often with all of us here...

I look forward to seeing some of your pieces, in fact, I think I will look for some now!

Regards,



Sunny

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~

When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ

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9 posted 09-05-2000 08:10 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

Hello Karilea. . .

Been looking here in the back. . . this one is absolutely wonderful. . .

Simply beautiful. . .

----------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

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10 posted 02-20-2005 12:38 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

the title caught my eye

I knew I would love this, though it's sad...
well, maybe because it's sad.
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