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Learning To Let Go
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Learning To Let Go |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The candle burns at both ends ... < !signature-->still I feel lost in the dark of night. Too afraid to close my eyes ... that I might miss seeing your light. Too tired to leave these four walls ... the ones I've painted with all my self doubt. Perhaps I find comfort in the resignation here, or I'm just too lost to find my way back out. Tonight not even the songs console me, it seems I've heard them all before. Tonight they are just reminders ... of this loneliness I feel to my core. I've always been good at forgiving, I always give too much of me away. I wish I knew how to hold you close ... without making you scared to stay. I could hold you like this forever, I just don't begin to know how to let go. How does one give up breathing ... how does one stop craving something they needed so. Still, there some things I wish to tell you, some things I want your heart to know. Maybe we can have some closure, maybe we can find release in letting go. I don't regret one single minute with you, you were worth every sweet tear I cried. You taught me about real honesty ... helped me to discover the woman I had hidden inside. I want to thank you for the inspiration, and for finding your own inspiration in me. Thank you for the beautiful words you gave, you know my heart adores the gift of poetry. All I truly want is for you to be happy, I want that more than you can know. More than I want you for myself ... I want us to find peace in letting go. Janet Marie It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving (How one move just puts me by myself) There you go just trusting someone else (Now I know I put us both through hell) ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong (I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me) And I'm not sayin (We ever had the right to hold on) (I just didn't wanna let you get away from me) ~MB20~ She says baby, It's 3AM ... I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. ~MB20~ [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Janet this is too sad girl, you need a hug!!! love ya, here is a smile  Beautiful poem as always |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
 These emotions sound too familiar.Very well written. Lovely poem by a lovely poet. --Dave "Don't let your character get camoflaged with your environment. Find who you are and let it stay in its true colors." --Rachel Joy Scott |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Jan, this is wonderful. . . the emotions that you show are very familiar. . . Would that we all would come to these realizations quite readily. . . -------------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I don't regret one single minute with you, you were worth every sweet tear I cried. You taught me about real honesty ... helped me to discover the woman I had hidden inside. I want to thank you for the inspiration, and for finding your own inspiration in me. Thank you for the beautiful words you gave, you know my heart adores the gift of poetry. All I truly want is for you to be happy, I want that more than you can know. More than I want you for myself ... I want us to find peace in letting go ........ Janet, this poem is a very expressive and emotionally compelling one...very enjoyable read...though the background of the poem is quite sad, but shows the strength of character.... regards, sudhir. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
I sit awestruck by these all too familiar emotions...beautiful poignant work. *hugs* ~H |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Just what I needed to hear! how dod you know??? All I truly want is for you to be happy, I want that more than you can know. More than I want you for myself ... I want us to find peace in letting go Just the words I have been trying to find!!! Thanks for posting this! Really enjoyed it and as usual Great writing!  Julie :) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oh...Janet...that is what I meant when I wrote, "bliss..."---unselfish love...so I leave you with another gift of poetry--one of my favorites by Percy Bysshe Shelley: One Word is Too Often Profaned One word is too often profaned For me to profane it, One feeling too falsely disdain'd For thee to disdain it. One hope is too like despair For prudence to smother, And Pity from thee more dear Than that from another. I cannot give what men call love; But wilt thou accept not The worship the heart lifts above And the Heavens reject not: The desire of the moth for the star, Of the night for the morrow, The devotion to something afar From the sphere of our sorrow? Hope this lends you some comfort...Love to you... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
RA, thank you hon, for the hugs and smiles right back at ya. Dave-gator...I know, you know...the reason we write..RIGHT? thanks my friend. Sven-gator ...YES...indeed...wise you are. Sud... thank you sir.. stronger as we write. thank you for seeing the parts of the poem that I wanted to be the foucus... not the sadness...but the release and respect. X-angel...thank you!! awestruck is a WONDEFUL word... we seem to be relating to each others words a lot lately which is the true gift of poetry and here. Julie ann...thank you...Im happy you find the emotions and words you need... we all learn from each other here... both from our mistakes and from the lessons we learn after our mistakes. Sen'...my sweet twin... *sitting ,shaking head*... want to guess who one of my fav poets is... we are SCARY... I adore Shelly..and that you would pick THIS ONE.... the last verse hits home... how many times I have I said... "drawn to the flame" .... we are indeed that moth ... thank you giving me the gift of poetry... love ya me sweet... thank you all love ya jm |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
What you've described here is so close to my heart it actually brought tears to my eyes as I was reading it. So so sad. I still feel it. Beautifully written Janet. kat |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow.... More hugs coming to you fellow butterfly... hope you fly in happiness soon my dear. K |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"you were worth every sweet tear I cried." Janet Marie, I think you will find many here who can relate to this poem of yours, myself included. Just lovely. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Janet~ this needs to go for the book...... I love this, I just love it!! -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
"Still, there some things I wish to tell you, some things I want your heart to know. Maybe we can have some closure, maybe we can find release in letting go. I don't regret one single minute with you, you were worth every sweet tear I cried. You taught me about real honesty ... helped me to discover the woman I had hidden inside." I AM AWESTRUCK!! Jan~ As always spectacular writing! Seems to me maybe your muse hasn't gone as far as you think. "She" just needed some time to rest and reflect. This piece here is beautiful my dear friend. You write your soul and I could hear the pain in every line, but I also could hear the release and the "no regrets." Every time we meet someone and open up ourselves we risk a chance of hurt, but also we grow from those experiences. It is what shapes who we are. I admire you, even in your darkest moments, you are able to hold onto some of the sweetness and let the bitterness go. Lots of us have never learned how to do that. I don't normally do this...but the two stanazs i picked out and put at the beginning of this reply were my favorite! They really struck a chord in me. And I know that you know why take care sweetie. Like you tell me be patient, sit back, and wait. Easier said than done huh lol. Love ya, Amy < !signature--> "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." [This message has been edited by Aimster (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
read it a second time. was as beautiful as the first! love ya, amy < !signature--> "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." [This message has been edited by Aimster (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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amazon_lover Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491Dublin,Ireland |
Hi Janet It was lovely and to find peace in letting one go is difficult and I feel it every moment. Sincerely A_L |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Oh yes....letting go is soo hard even when it feels right to!! I wish it could be easier!! Your poem captured that all too well!! Good poem!!  Bridgette "Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
JM - Simply breathtaking, such a heartfelt piece of writing. Bonnie |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Once again you have penned your emotions perfectly. Very sad Jan..... Hugs, Marina It is blessing to have wings for your words, and ink to flow from pen. Marina Crossley |
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Eskendale Junior Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 17 |
I treasure the poems that tell stories... and this is one of them... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Jan~ I read this last night right after you posted it and sat here thinking of so many things but unable to put into words what this meant to me. The feelings are mirrors of cut glass. The pain and the turmoil are all so vivid and amazing. Your last stanza kicked the wind right out of me...still today I ask...How can two people feel the exact same thing...I'm not sure I even want an answer I just find comfort in knowing that you know that I know. I truly love this and I love you for writing this and sharing your heart and soul in this piece. **Angel Wing Hugs** For this one my S.S. I do have one question though...where the heck is that little vote box??? I would have voted 1000000000000000000 times for this little jewel!! Pain is not pretty but the way you write it is breathtaking~ |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
((((((JM)))))))) Now pass a tissue woman, dang I hate when you make me cry. Not really but had to say it... a macho thing ya know...LOL Love ya precious-gator, you hang in there... You know I know how you feel... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Janet this is beautiful..we all want to hold on to love and not let go and still that is a part of love...letting go....I hope your soft and tender heart will receive all the love it passes out...James |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Too tired to leave these four walls ... the ones I've painted with all my self doubt. Perhaps I find comfort in the resignation here, or I'm just too lost to find my way back out. Janet, you have made me sad now. Wonderful written and expressed in your beautiful honest style… you call it emotion out bursts, I call it soul searching powerful poetry. An excellent poem. Take care, loves and hugs and a big smile. Still, there some things I wish to tell you, some things I want your heart to know. Maybe we can have some closure, maybe we can find release in letting go. < !signature--> "We Irish are too poetic to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures." Oscar Wilde A rock pile ceases to be a rock pile the moment a single man contemplates it, bearing within him the image of a cathedral. Antoine de Saint-Exupéry [This message has been edited by brian madden (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ Poignantly done. 'I wish I knew how to hold you close ... without making you scared to stay.' Gently ... oh, so gently holding on ... to letting go. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Janet this is so well done. You have captured the sadness of letting go. Without a doubt it is one of the hardest times in a person's life. I love the lack of selfishness in the words, it makes the character in the poem, a very giving person. If that character is you then God love you! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
thank you EVERYONE for your amazing and sweet replies... I truly feel each one...and smile from each one... this poem wasnt meant to be so sad... I guess it just came out that way... But it needed to be wrote... thank you for always understanding me and my "emotional outbursts put to rhyme"... even when I dont *smile*... later-kind-poet-gators jm |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Beautiful Janet Marie!! I could hold you like this forever, I just don't begin to know how to let go. How does one give up breathing ... how does one stop craving something they needed so. So really beautiful, you've captured my feelings. How does one stop? indeed! My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
I felt this one from the heart. Hugs to you and thank you for sharing this one so beautifully. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Well, I read it before and thought I replied, but you know me, no memory, dah what my name. Great poem Janet, I love the meaning and the last verse say's it all to me. Parker |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I've come thru this poem three times so far and finally I've found it in me to tell you that it has deeply touched my heart. Coco |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
JM, Oh, my sweet poetic friend...these feelings are very familiar. I can feel your emotions so vividly. Excellent writing. Brought a tear to me eye. These lines are superb... All I truly want is for you to be happy, I want that more than you can know. More than I want you for myself ... I want us to find peace in letting go. I think that is all we ever want for those that we love. If that happiness cannot be with us, then we must set them free. Have to at least try everything to make it a go first, then we can let go without regrets. Wonderful words of wisdom. LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Letting go is the hardest thing anyone ever has to do...be it a child or a lover...all the pain all the glory all the fear... well said |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Though you may not see it yet, you are growing from this experience... and you are already so lovely! Great, expressive poem! |
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Silkdragon Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 65 |
Janet... Well, I've just started out here at Passions, and this is one of the first poems i've read. I like it very, very much. It's so sad, but I thought it was really touching. I'll look for more of your posts. Thanks for this poem. Erin |
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