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Love is Frozen
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Love is Frozen |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Love is Frozen I wanted love but it passed me by A tear crystallizes in my eye Now I'm paying the price All alone skating on ice It's very cold but the wind burns Falling down on all my turns Slowly snowflakes float to the ground No soft voices whispering sound A beautiful figure dancing so high My head is down with a silent cry She looks so happy gliding in joy I wish she could see this lonely boy I hide in laughter, a blanket of fun But deep inside me cold has won It's getting colder as time goes on Love is frozen the sun is gone |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
*shivering* VERY descriptive, and a nice metaphor too...great work, Insect! Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh Insect,...I have never seen you this way. You ok? This is so well written...your depictions so vivid. Ouch. I hide in Laughter,...a blanket of fun,...but deep inside me cold has won. Here,....have a warm {hug}. Take care. *Peace. |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Brrrr!!! That kind of cold is a dangerous thing! Wonderful writing!!  --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Wow! I'm speechless. I use humor in that way myself. Joke and no one will ever know what's inside. My smile is my curtain and no one will ever know what's behind. Great for what you see on the outside but not for the soul that hurts inside. Beautifully written and very emotional. Someday somehow things have a way of working out. I tell myself that often. Thanks for sharing that. OH! Here's some smiles for you..lol kat |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I loved the title and the poem, sad it was, but you need a hug to melt that frozen love of yours!!! |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Elizabeth, SpitFire, Tennessee Angel, and A Romantic Heart. It's cold come over here and get under my blanket! Oh! And kat is going to bring some hot chocolate. Get under here kat so we can have a group hug!… Hey! Whose hand is that? Thanks for the warm reply's and hugs and smiles and…. Umm! Well thanks for making me feel warm inside. Ok who's going for ice-cream! I feel like a snowflake melting on your tongues from all these warm sentiments…Thanks again |
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