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Butterflies_dont_cry
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0 posted 2000-06-19 09:43 PM




A spring shower was cause to run
Until you twirled me in the rain
The glow of the moon announced the day was done
Until it became a lover's domain

A rainbow was a only a colorful view
Until it’s arch drew hope in my skies
The stars were reserved for a midnight debut
Until I saw them in your soft loving eyes

A poem was just a talented rhyme
Until you wove one just for me
A moment was a blink in time
Until you shared a few with me  

My soul was a dwelling for fears
Until you promised you would stay
My eyes only knew the sadness of tears
Until your tender kiss took them all away

Love was a license for pain
Until you surrounded me in a loving glow
Alone was what I wanted to remain
Until your heart I came to know


© Copyright 2000 Butterflies_dont_cry - All Rights Reserved
Tennessee Angel
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Tennessee
1 posted 2000-06-19 09:47 PM


Ah, Butterflies!  This is one of my favorites of yours...and I say that thinking that I may have said that about many of yours that I have read.  But, you are truly a gifted poet and I enjoy everything you put to paper.

--You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.--

Elizabeth
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2 posted 2000-06-19 09:49 PM


Butterflies~

I loved this! You expressed the love you feel so well. Wonderful, wonderful work!

Elizabeth


I'm grabbing my hat and coat
I'm leaving the cat a note
Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town!



Janet Marie
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3 posted 2000-06-19 09:59 PM


OH MAN----I AM SOARING AROUND THE ROOM
GIRL THIS IS AWESOME, EXQUISITE!!!!!
OMG I LOVE THIS POEM!!!!!!!!!
AND YOU BETTER GET BACK HERE AND CHECK THAT SUBMIT-TO-BOOK-BOX!!!
THIS IS SO BEAUTIFUL AND PERFECT...
I LOVE SEEING YOU WRITE LIKE THIS
IT GAVE ME WINGS TONITE
AND I NEEDED EM BABY...
I NEEDED EM
THANK YOU
LOVE YA
JM


EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...
4 posted 2000-06-20 05:55 AM


Butterflies......my dear friend, where do you start with something like this!
Awesome, exquisite, beautiful, perfect, wonderful, a gifted poet.....all are words that aptly describe this work and the poet. This is fabulous work my friend!
One would be so very deeply touched to know that you have these feelings of love!

Take Care!

God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown



Butterflies_dont_cry
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5 posted 2000-06-20 08:14 AM



TA* You are much to kind, thank you from the
bottom of my heart for your sweet replies and for reading~

Elizabeth* Thank you very much.  It was a
gift for an amazing person...doesn't do him
justice though!  Thank you for reading~

Jan*  WOW, and here I wasn't going to post
this at all I lack BIG TIME in the Love Poem
department   you write what you know...ya
know?!  Thank you S.S. I appreciate it very
much, I do LOVE these flutterbies from you  ~

Eagle* Thank you so much my dear friend...Love inspires many things, even a
rare love poem from me   I'm touched that
you enjoyed it and your kindness gave me a
**blush**
Thank you from the bottom of my heart~

Kit McCallum
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6 posted 2000-06-20 08:57 AM


This was exquisite Butterflies!  What a wonderful tribute to someone special ... touched my heart this did! Beautifully written!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Nate Dogg
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Georgia, Fulton
7 posted 2000-06-20 05:30 PM


THIS IS AN AWESOME PIECE BUTTERFLIES AND VERY HEARTOUCHING AND WELL-WRITTEN! THANKS FOR SHARING THIS GREAT PIECE!

Nathan

Butterflies_dont_cry
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8 posted 2000-06-20 11:19 PM


Kit~ He's a beautiful person...my only regret is that I couldn't have said it better.  Thank you for your kind reply~

Nate~ Thank you so much I appreciate you reading~

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
9 posted 2000-07-24 10:20 AM


Digging I went and a vein of gold I found.  This is so tender,sweet, and openly sincere that I had to bring it back up.  I am rejoicing in the riches that I have found this wonderful morn.
Paula Finn
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missouri
10 posted 2000-07-24 10:52 AM


How perfectly awesome is this love you share with us

never say never

TerryW
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Louisville, Mississippi, USA
11 posted 2000-07-24 12:01 PM


Butterflies~
      Oh, my dear, this is so beautiful!  You  are incredible, my dear!  I don't think you could have said this any better, my friend!  I have to agree with JanetMarie ~ Your poetry always gives my wings!


Love Ya~


~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

Butterflies_dont_cry
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Michigan
12 posted 2000-07-24 10:34 PM



Mark* Thank you so much for your kindness and your sweet comments...always a smile  

Paula* Thank you...Love can be a beautiful thing~

Terry* I'm glad I could give you wings...just
remember...the dry cleaning bills can break
you   Thank you always for your comments~

EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...
13 posted 2001-10-13 10:18 PM


You know my friend there are some real gems to be found in the archives, and this is certainly one of them!

"Let me pierce the realm of glamour
So I know just what I am." ~ Van Morrison


CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043

14 posted 2001-11-11 02:33 AM


BDC, you just write soooooooooooo beautifully ya know that huh...
HugsNsmiles2uSweetie
*~coco~*

passing shadows
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displaced
15 posted 2003-01-06 04:11 AM


what a change!
EagleOne
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Between a laugh and a tear...
16 posted 2003-01-17 12:03 PM


They say the cream always rises to the top; well this one is a living example I think. Still a wonderful piece, still my favourite!

I don't know where I'm running now, I'm just running on... ~ Jackson Browne

Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
17 posted 2003-11-25 01:31 AM


DearestPoetess~
Though you are no longer here, I hope that someday you will return to see what we admirers think of your beautiful poetry~

This is just exquisite~

I miss you, little flutterbye~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
       noles1@totcon.com   

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