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Lorraine Nisbet
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0 posted 2000-06-19 07:28 PM




When You Were Mine

If only to recapture
from the beginning,
what we once had
when we were winning.

Everything came easy
for you and me,
the attraction, the closeness
to be in our own company.

I miss the days of flowers
given for no reason,
now for holidays only
I must be out of season.

To think of the time
when we were so close,
and to watch it flee
hurts the most.

~Lorraine~


A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur


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Elizabeth
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1 posted 2000-06-19 09:33 PM


How very sad, Lorraine. The last four lines say so much.

Elizabeth


I'm grabbing my hat and coat
I'm leaving the cat a note
Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town!



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2 posted 2000-06-19 09:35 PM


Oh Lorraine, these verses are so heartfelt.
I don't know how I could have let this one  slip by

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3 posted 2000-06-20 01:01 AM


Wonderful Lorraine. . .

The beginning is always the best part isn't it?  It's sad when the end comes and we always wonder what happened. . .

Excellent. . .

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Jeremiah Johnson
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4 posted 2000-06-20 03:42 AM


i See i question here whitin this great poem and that queation is why must the heart feel pain. we'll no one really knows it just does love the words keep it up

I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul



Lorraine Nisbet
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5 posted 2000-06-20 07:42 PM



Elizabeth~
Thank you much!

Hi Coco~
I'm glad you stopped by to read! Thanks!!

Sven~
Thank you for the kind words!!

Jeremiah~
Thank you...nice to meet you!

~Lorraine




A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur


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6 posted 2000-06-20 07:49 PM


Lorraine~
Enjoyed the read of this very much.
I understand the pain.
~*Marge*~


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7 posted 2000-06-20 07:55 PM


~Lloraine,

this was beautiful yet sad. the last
stanza sums it all up. painful but true
expressions from deep within your heart.
I enjoyed this read very much!
Take care.
~Amy~

"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




Lorraine Nisbet
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8 posted 2000-06-22 09:28 PM



Marge...Amy

Glad you liked.  Thank you for reading!

~Lorraine





A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur


JamesMichael
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9 posted 2000-06-23 03:56 PM


You have expressed perfectly the regrets we have so desperately wanting to hold on to the last remnants of love.    James
Lorraine Nisbet
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10 posted 2000-06-23 06:55 PM



Thank you, James, for your understanding!!

~Lorraine


A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur


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