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svtcobra
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since 2000-05-23
Posts 14
Syracuse,NY USA

0 posted 2000-06-19 02:27 AM


Devotion
  a word you can't relate to me

Commitment
  something you give to someone else

Time
  a thing I need more of with you

Love
  a thing that you see as foreign to us

Friendship
  a line that has already been crossed

Confusion
  a perpetual state that I am in

Pain
  my heart is so heavy

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1 posted 2000-06-19 03:18 AM


Svtcobra~ this made my heart hurt...it's so sad. Very well written. -SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB


Jan
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 114

2 posted 2000-06-19 12:54 PM


This is so sad...and beautiful.


Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
3 posted 2000-06-19 03:03 PM


Hi svtcobra,

Man you just sumed up my reality, WOW and you did so well and completely, I hope you are not going through this too. But if you are I wish you only the best, thank you for sharing this one it is perfect.

Love, Cerenity

laryalee
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since 2000-06-19
Posts 352
Alberta, Canada
4 posted 2000-06-19 03:40 PM


I feel the sadness you are sharing... perhaps there'll come a time when you may want to add:
   "Hope
  ......."

LL

amazon_lover
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since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
Dublin,Ireland
5 posted 2000-06-19 06:03 PM


Hi
Thats a very precise one..I hope everything works out for you. Its difficult if there's a lack of commitment and devotion...

Sincerely
A_L

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

6 posted 2000-06-19 07:59 PM


~A_L said it best....precise.  Well said and touching....truly sad,..but well put. Take care. *Peace.
Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
7 posted 2000-06-19 11:44 PM


He laughs as she runs screaming
   from the frog gripped in his hands
And chases after her across
   the schoolyard
Until she lets him catch up
   to her...

I want to be loved like that.

With trembling fingers he pins
   the flower to her dress
Then grins at her fathers frown
   as he snaps a picture
And a blush stains her cheeks
   a delicate pink...

I want to be loved like that.

He clears his throat as he places
   the ring on her finger
And swears his undying love
   in front of his friends
As tears run down her cheeks
   for the faith he is expressing...

I want to be loved like that.

His heart races and his
   hands tremble
The first time he holds
   his newborn son
And she gazes tenderly at
   him through pain weary eyes...

I want to be loved like that.

He comes home, exhausted,
   worn
Too many heartaches, too many
   cares
And she kisses the fears
   away...

I want to be loved like that.

He tenderly brushes silvered
   hair from her face
And places a kiss on her
   upturned lips
She smiles and gently squeezes
   age worn hands...

I want to be loved like that.

He slowly places one last rose
   on the winter hard ground
And stumbles from this
   empty place
As she watches him from
   heavens gate...waiting...

I want to be loved like that.

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
8 posted 2000-06-19 11:45 PM


im sorry i really messed up here I am so new at this
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