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Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
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Brooksville, Fl, U.S

0 posted 2000-06-18 03:45 PM


As I look out this window
   Watching, waiting
   As time goes bye
   Hoping for a chance
    To take my ride
      Along side
The other clocks ticking
    As time goes bye


I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul



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Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
1 posted 2000-06-18 04:09 PM


Jeremiah,

Short and sweet!!  Love it!!  

Lone Wolf


Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith


kaile
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2 posted 2000-06-23 11:58 PM


interesting play on the words "bye" and "by"...creative work here

felt the agony and helplessness of waiting and the doubt of whether this wait is going to be worthwhile a beauty as always

keep posting

Jenn Cirrincione
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3 posted 2001-03-16 04:06 PM


Short, but wonderful!! You seem to have a way with words. Hehehe luv ya man!

Jenn


"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia



passing shadows
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4 posted 2003-01-06 04:24 AM


well done!
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