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Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
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on the roof again

0 posted 2000-06-18 04:45 AM




My Rose

Falling in love; it hurts so much.
The pain just grows as you're falling apart.
But how is it that it hurts even more
If I never had you from the start.

Does any of this mean one damn thing?
Is this all just wasted time i've spent?
I always trip on the line that divides
who I am and who I invent.
Neither one of us will let the other in too deep.
Too afraid of what the other's gonna think.

All this pain and failure makes me feel
like I've been living a hundred years.
I can't remember ever sleeping
without a pillow full of tears.
My soul is abused and gone;
I keep coming back for more.
You're the prettiest rose in the garden;
And I'm bleeding from the thorns.

How can wanting to give you the world
be something I shouldn't feel?
Are cold shoulders and dodging eyes
signs of emotions not so real?
You never could really look me in the eye.
Cover up your lies with all my truths.
Haven't you heard? Love's a two-way street.
I got a feeling I'm bein' used.

The past always holds the better days.
Then I tripped on the feeling of being alive.
I mistook you for someone who gave a damn.
The good memories are struggling to survive.
I was on my knees, prayin' for rain.
Didn't know I'd get a storm.
You're the prettiest rose in the garden;
and I'm bleeding from the thorns.

Maybe someplace, far from now
When I don't need to remember anymore,
I'll stop by and pay you a visit
to pick up my heart from your bedroom floor.
While I'm there, I'd also like back
my intensity and my attitude.
And if you're finished, I'd like my soul
and all the emotions you abused.

If you could just take off your armor
and leave your status home for the night.
See the Me you always ignore.
See the Me you could learn to like.
Why am I the Runner-up
whenever i run your race?
But play the game inside my heart
and you'll always get first place.

Gave you my heart but you didn't
seem to know what it was for.
You still the prettiest rose in the garden.
And I'm still bleeding from the thorns.


We all got somethin' we need to atone for.

© Copyright 2000 Ethan Halo - All Rights Reserved
netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
1 posted 2000-06-18 05:03 AM



And I'm still bleeding from the thorns.

Ethan - this is a wonderful
poem -so heartfelt and sad -

~netswan



JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
2 posted 2000-06-18 06:07 AM


Ethan you have said it all so well...after going thru this a few times I have come to the conclusion that...I couldn't help falling in love with her...and she couldn't help not falling in love with me.   James
ESP
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since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
3 posted 2000-06-18 06:34 AM


This is really descriptive, you express it so well!

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


"Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14
Posts 685
USA
4 posted 2000-06-18 09:53 AM


Very nice Ethan...thanks for reposting..

chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.



Ethan Halo
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
5 posted 2000-06-18 11:53 AM


dear all repliers

thanks for the kinds words everyone. they mean a lot.
James: boy-o-boy, you summed it right up for me! it's the story of life.

We all got somethin' we need to atone for.

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
6 posted 2000-06-18 01:29 PM


Ethan
this was beautiful! seems you and I
are on the same page these days. glad
to see we are both working it out with
our pen and paper. take care my friend.
amy  

"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
7 posted 2000-06-19 06:43 AM


"I always trip on the line that divides
who I am and who I invent."

"I can't remember ever sleeping
without a pillow full of tears."

Incredible emotions pour forth from your heart to your pen Ethan (loved the lines up above especially).  Well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

8 posted 2000-06-20 10:51 PM


Maybe someplace, far from now
When I don't need to remember anymore,
I'll stop by and pay you a visit
to pick up my heart from your bedroom floor.
While I'm there, I'd also like back
my intensity and my attitude.
And if you're finished, I'd like my soul
and all the emotions you abused.
--------------------

told ya id find it *smile*
this is the first one of your i ever read if memory serves me right...
either way its one of my faves
glad you submitted it
later-ethan-gator
jm

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since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367
State of constant confusion!
9 posted 2000-06-21 12:40 PM


WOW

Amazingly descriptive

Count my vote

All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep



A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03
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Forever In Your Heart
10 posted 2000-06-21 02:52 AM


Liked it much very lovely words but sad
Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
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Brooksville, Fl, U.S
11 posted 2000-06-21 03:01 AM


i love your expression here both sad and lovely. keep up your writings and i'll keep reading them.
serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

12 posted 2000-06-21 03:33 AM


Related well to the angst and underlying vulnerability.....and I voted for you anyway...lol...hugs to ya.
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