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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Shadows Shadows dancing on the wall changing with the eerie light making pictures of many things images etched in shadowed halls shadows moving on the wall maybe old lace or a ghostly face weaving pictures your hand can't trace silently passing down shadowed halls soon moonlight filters in altering shadows once again sleepy eyes follow the shadow dance wondering what would happen perchance If the shadowed etchings were really real and the secrets of the walls were revealed written gracefully by shadowed ink leaving you lying in bed trying to think What are the shadows trying to write while in the bed you cringe in fright? Do all these etchings mean a thing or do they leave it to your imaginings? Shadows come and Shadows go As does the imagery of your mind which stalks, in fearful shadows through the night, the shadows of time ~netswan |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This has a lovely flow and reminds of my childhood fears of the dark...  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
hey girl... you must have read my mind...(scary thought for you LOL)... I was thinking earlier you hadn't posted in a bit...was gonna e-you..glad your back love this poem.. great imagery... loved the rhyme and flow.. very enjoyable read swan-gator  later jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving (How one move just puts me by myself) There you go just trusting someone else (Now I know I put us both through hell) ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong (I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me) And I'm not sayin (We ever had the right to hold on) (I just didn't wanna let you get away from me) ~MB20~ She says baby, It's 3AM ... I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. ~MB20~ |
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Jan Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 114 |
This poem brought me back to spending the night at my Grandma's house when I was 5 or 6. I always had to sleep in my Uncle Curtis's room, which was painted black and filled with crucifixes (he was brain-injured, and, of course, not in the room when I was sleeping there). Anyway, it was a great poem with wonderful imagery. I know it will be a poem that I find myself thinking about when I'm trying to go to sleep at night. LOL |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
good rhyme scheme. i thought of the night light just down the hall from my bedroom door. the poem paints a creepy Poe-esque picture. i dig it. "You are not special. You are not a brilliant and unique snowflake. You are part of the same decaying organic matter as everyone else. We are all part of the same compost heap. We are the all-singing, all-dancing crap of the world." -Tyler Durden "He who makes a beast of himself is rid of the pain of being a man." -Hunter S. Thompson "On a long enough timeline, the survival rate for everyone is zero." -Tyler Durden We all got somethin' to atone for. -Ethan Halo |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Severn - thank you - glad it evoked memories Janet Marie ---I have been very busy building my online businesses - -great to see you again. And, of course got a grandbaby ---) Jan - welcome to the forum -- glad you enjoyed. Ethan -- yes, how cute poe'esque - thanks |
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MagnoliaBlue Member
since 2000-05-12
Posts 367 |
Made me think of when you have clothes hanging over the back of the chair in your room...and your imagination sees all sorts of scary things in the drape and folds of the material...in the dark! Good read. You have been missed! MagnoliaBlue Pay a visit to: http://cyberageadventures.com You will love it! "A poem is just an expression of my life and heart."*CJB* ~*My Skipper Jim, |
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Very, very nice Shadows, clouds....it's amazing how our imagination can fashion them into whatever our mind sees and remembers. Good thoughts here...... |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
netswan, If those shadows and walls coud talk, they'd speak volumes. Great writing my friend. I have missed you here. LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Nice poem Enjoyed the read!!!! |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Very enjoyable! Great poem!! ~Lorraine A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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