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CMGrimm
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since 2000-02-14
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0 posted 2000-06-17 08:37 PM


She came to me
this rainy dreary
weekend afternoon...

She said to me
we have a problem
we need to speak real soon...

She looked at me
then closed her eyes
and asked me to help her pack...

She turned from me
and walked away
and never did look back...

I sat alone
and watched her drive
away in my new car...

I sat and cried
these lonely tears
and wished upon this star...

I closed my eyes
and prayed to God
that soon she would return...

I woke up tired
with swollen eyes
When will I ever learn...

I hoped and prayed
and said some chants
and checked the garage again...

I never should have left
my laptop
inside that piece of tin....


Christopher M. Grimm

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Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions.  - ANON.




[This message has been edited by CMGrimm (edited 06-17-2000).]

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poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646
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1 posted 2000-06-17 08:46 PM


OH ha ha ha  OUCH, this is too funny!  Er....okay, so maybe it's not funny to YOU!  LOL  I think I would be more worried about the new car being gone!  hehehe  Thanks for the chuckle!  
anomaly187
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 284
San Francisco,CA,US
2 posted 2000-06-17 08:46 PM


heh that was very beautiful..let me go see if i can find anything else you have written.



"My heart is broke,but i have some glue. Help me inhale,and mend it with you. We'll float around,and hang out on clouds, then we'll come down,and have

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
3 posted 2000-06-17 08:51 PM


LOL..loved this!!!  
Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
4 posted 2000-06-17 09:13 PM


ROFL.....I like this!!!!  Good one!!!!  Guess you learned your lesson the hard way!!

LW


Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith


Eloise
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since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096
Wyoming
5 posted 2000-06-17 09:19 PM


Great poem.  Enjoyed the read.  
netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
Washington
6 posted 2000-06-17 10:47 PM


LOL Chris ------ got me laughing

Well done!

~netswan

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

7 posted 2000-06-18 12:18 PM


what a drag,
cant read poetry in passions with the car...
this would make a good ironic country song

baby took my heart and took my car ..
took my puter ...
she wont get far...

nevermind LOL( sorry too much caffeine tonite)
funny and not...
when ya got lemons...make lemonaid  
good luck to ya
jm


It's amazing
How you make your face just like a wall
How you take your heart and turn it off
How I turn my head and you lose it all ...
And it's unnerving
(How one move just puts me by myself)
There you go just trusting someone else
(Now I know I put us both through hell) ...
I'm not sayin
That there was nothing wrong
(I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me)
And I'm not sayin
(We ever had the right to hold on)
(I just didn't wanna let you get away from me)
~MB20~

She says baby,
It's 3AM ... I must be lonely,
When she says baby,
Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes,
Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it.
~MB20~


CMGrimm
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8 posted 2000-06-18 09:48 AM


LOL...thanks for the comments everyone...
chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.



Jan
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Posts 114

9 posted 2000-06-18 10:36 AM


Ouch!  At least you kept your sense of humor!
vandana
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10 posted 2000-06-18 12:37 PM


Nice poem!!!!!!!
Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
11 posted 2000-06-18 01:13 PM


chris,
this was serious yet funny. sorry
couldn't help laughing at the end.
love your work!
take care.
amy  

"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




CMGrimm
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12 posted 2000-06-18 09:33 PM


Thanks AMy, Jan, and vandana...

chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.



sea_of_okc
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since 1999-06-15
Posts 568
Oklahoma City, OK, USA
13 posted 2000-06-18 10:08 PM


ROTFLMAO

TOO FUNNY!!!! Well not really... but still!
Don't feel so bad Chris, I lost a house a car, a PC AND to top it all off still have to pay the &%^$^#% money every month!!!!
No matter how bad it seems someone always has it worse!
Thanks for the laugh bud...SS

CMGrimm
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Posts 685
USA
14 posted 2000-06-19 07:19 AM


Thanks for enjoying sea...lol

chris

Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.



SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

15 posted 2000-06-19 08:12 AM


~Chris,....haha...getting in line here to say this was great.  Made me laugh....although I am sorry things didn't work out,..but shoot, haha...this is too much. Love it. *Peace.
Dennis L. White
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since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.
16 posted 2000-06-19 10:36 AM


CMgrimm,
  This is too funny, ROFLMAO! Your wit Sparkles here! WAY TO GO!
Dennis :^)



Moonbeams radiate
When the veiling cloud has past
Playful shadows dance

Dennis L. White :^)

linda munday
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 315
Adelaide, Australia
17 posted 2000-06-19 09:37 PM


A perfect blend of both sadness and humour.
Just the way to treat such situations.

X Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
Oregon
18 posted 2000-06-19 09:41 PM


yeah yeah yeah
what a cruel woman!
take my car
take my dog
take my money
LEAVE THE LAPTOP!!!!!!!
I love it!
~Heather

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