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Jan
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since 2000-06-14
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0 posted 2000-06-17 08:19 PM


Sleep

Your voice drifts through my consiousness
Your weight envelops me
Set adrift in your arms
there is no tomorrow
or yesterday,
there isn't even now.
And when it's over I'm sated
Finally free.
Content as we loosen our tangled bodies
and Sleep.



[This message has been edited by Jan (edited 06-17-2000).]

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Mike
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since 1999-06-19
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1 posted 2000-06-17 08:57 PM


Nicely written.  Enjoyed your poem.
Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
2 posted 2000-06-17 09:07 PM


Jan,

Great poem for your first post.  Wonderful description.  Nothing else exists outside of that room.  Looking forward to reading more of your work.

Welcome to Passions!!  

Lone Wolf


Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith


netswan
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since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
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3 posted 2000-06-17 11:05 PM


Welcome to Passions, Jan!

What a wonderful poem --- short, to the
point and good

~netswan

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
4 posted 2000-06-17 11:33 PM


What a beautiful description!  Welcome to Passions I'll be sure to look for more in the future from you! Thank you for sharing this~
Jan
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 114

5 posted 2000-06-17 11:40 PM


Thank you to everyone.  I've never shared anything that I have written, so your feedback means a great deal.

I love reading everyones poetry and am learning a lot.  Thanks again.

dreamy_eyes
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6 posted 2000-06-18 07:10 AM


Short and sweet!  
whiskey
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7 posted 2000-06-18 10:35 AM


Very nice peom , well written , I enjoyed it alot  
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