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Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2000-06-17 07:54 PM


               Forever

Ancient mountains sheltered in snow,
Surrounded by the clouds below,
Send waters down through greenery,
Descending to the green gray sea.

Above the mountains blows the sky,
Making rain and snow to fly,
Filtering blues of hue on hue,
Ever changing new to new.

Time is layered in the rock,
In silent strata like a clock,
The handles move in rust and dust,
They rise and fall within the crust.

Enigma and a doubting endure,
Fragments the entire allure.
The wealth is there; I see the sign,
We are the gold within the mine.

A sphinx within a paradox,
As I thoughtfully change my sox.



© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269
Pennsylvania
1 posted 2000-06-17 08:11 PM


I truly believe some of the greatest poetry ever written was concieved while the poet was changing his socks, and this is a great one. Now I know why everyone missed you so much. There's only one Sy.
Love
Liz

Mike
Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

2 posted 2000-06-17 08:59 PM


Maybe I should start wearing socks...
Nicely written, enjoyed the poem.

Severn
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704

3 posted 2000-06-17 11:09 PM


grin grin

good to see you again dear Sy...

and as you usual you don't disappoint...

here's the bit that got me:

Enigma and a doubting endure,
Fragments the entire allure.
The wealth is there; I see the sign,
We are the gold within the mine

Just blooming wonderful...

K


Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2000-06-17 11:12 PM


Filtering blues of hue on hue,
Ever changing new to new.

Time is layered in the rock,
In silent strata like a clock,
The handles move in rust and dust,
They rise and fall within the crust.

Enigma and a doubting endure,
Fragments the entire allure.
The wealth is there; I see the sign,
We are the gold within the mine.

A sphinx within a paradox,
As I thoughtfully change my sox.

---------------

well, me thinks you are well inspired
from your trip ...
me thinks me needs to change me sox too  
perfect ponderings Sy guy
later-clean sox-gator
me

Meadowmuse
Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

5 posted 2000-06-18 05:38 AM


But you know, your Sox really have to "want" to change...  

Loved this, classic you, Seymour...

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau



ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
6 posted 2000-06-18 06:03 AM


Really good word pictures. I like the twist at the end. A sphinx within a paradox. Now there's a mind twister. But are you moving from red sox to white sox or vice versa. Thoughtfully that is.......
Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
7 posted 2000-06-18 08:14 AM


Elizabeth,
And there is only one Elizabeth. I am enjoying your posts, I don't know how but you keep getting better and better. Love Sy

Mike,
Maybe you should, enjoyed your comment, thanks.

Severn,
And so are you blooming wonderful. So nice to hear from you. Enjoyed the comment. *L*

Janet,
Had a ball on the trip, your too cute for words, thanks sox gator. *L*

Meadowmuse,
Thanks for the classic me. How could I write poetry without changing my sox? *L*

Ethome,
Mostly to clean sox, Thoughtfull comment, thanks.

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
8 posted 2000-06-18 08:18 AM


The sphinx really coaxed you to change your socks, it seems... nice poem here, Seymour, enjoyed it

Regards, sudhir

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