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False Reality....oldie from #2
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False Reality....oldie from #2 |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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My plates are made of plastic A regal shade of blue As are my knives and forks and spoons And serving dishes, too. If, by some chance I stumble, As I am passing by And knock them off the table They do not break....they do not die. I have two plastic goldfish Within a plastic bowl Providing relaxation To ease a troubled soul. As long as I am careful To keep the batteries dry They'll swim along forever They do not sink....they do not die. I have a cocker spaniel I named my buddy Ruff. He doesn't run or chase a ball - How can he when he's stuffed? But he is always there for me. Where I am-there he lies And, though he'll never lick my face, He does not leave....he does not die. Your picture hangs above my bed. The glass and frame are fake But if it falls down from the wall It has no chance to break. Your beauty takes my breath away. Your smile of sweet delight Dispels the gloom from my small room; Illuminates the night. I place my fingers on your cheek And, teardrops in my eye, I disregard reality...... You don't get sick You do not die. |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
You should have entered this one for the book, I’d have voted for it! Then again that’s true for every one you write. Thanks for the chance to (re) read and reply. Craig Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool: But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Oh dear, or deer...ooops There's not much pleasure in being stuffed...hmmmm...but you know what I mean...no matter the hurt, no matter the consequences, we only have one life... Go get yourself a dog that does lick, does growl, does take up most of the bed and best of all, wags his/her tail when they sence you're on the way home...  And yep, know this is another of your stories but some people will rely on inanimate objects because they won't get hurt....now where's the nearest taxidermist..I have a cat that needs stuffing...oooops...one problem, he's alive and sleeping on my pillow...  Sorry Bal...I'm sure you'll forgive me though....RG on bended knees... HUSG |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I too would vote for it...one of my favorites...wait! ALL yours are one of my favorites!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dear Mike, Your poem does not impress me. Because you impressed me the first time we met and there is not a piece you have written that I could ever forget. Sy |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
 perfectly said i don't remember this one but now i'll never forget it |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Vunderbar! *hugs* H |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Your poem's wordplay is engaging, your wit warm and soothing, your delivery sloooooowww, and your ending satisfying, and I hope this doesn't get censored., |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Your picture hangs above my bed. The glass and frame are fake But if it falls down from the wall It has no chance to break. Your beauty takes my breath away. Your smile of sweet delight Dispels the gloom from my small room; Illuminates the night. I place my fingers on your cheek And, teardrops in my eye, I disregard reality...... You don't get sick You do not die. ---------------- NOTHING false or fake here... just PURE hearfelt honesty of emotion... wanna say it with me my sweet deer... I LOVE WHEN YOU WRITE LIKE THIS love this sweet poem too love Sy's reply as well... ah hell i love the poets too *smile* later-tender-poet-gator jm |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Balladeer, you should definitely submit this one for the book!!! All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Oh Balladeer - this is excellent - you'd get my vote on this one for the book in voices --- ~netswan |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Craig....I forgot all about that! Thanks for the kind words, friend Rainbow...You would never stuff Snoops!!! Of course I forgive you but thank you for the bended knees  deVine one....you're way up on my favorites list, too! Thank you Sy....I will always thank you for your friendship and I'm real glad the boat didn't sink! Welcome back..... Doreen....To linger in your memory makes me smile Thank you!Xangel....Dankeshoen, mein shotz!!! Irish Rose....Censored!? I'm gonna hang it over my bed! I love the qualities you love Thank you...JanetMarie...Sounds to me like you're just a lover....and a very sweet person. I thank you, ma'am. Jeffrey and Netswan....OK I guess I will, then. My thanks for your replies |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I am real, no fake stuff here, no silicone...nope all real, nails, hair, and most of all heart! True so true are your words...loved your poem sir Balladeer! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ Wonderful verse here, sir. Enjoyed very much. I'm going through the archives and having a blast reading our exchanges. What fun ! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I am grateful of you to have reposted this one....I am very glad to have read this one, Sir. Balladeer. very glad! regards, -sudhir. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I had this one pictured perfectly the first time so it was with great pleasure I read again... and again... and again... Yup...I think it's more than time for our 'Deer to come out with his very own book! Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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UNC STAR Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 67Hinesville,Ga,USA |
Craig, that poem was tight. I liked the way you expressed your feelings in that poem. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
yep this one is definately book worthy...its got my vote |
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Novacaine For The Soul Member
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122New Orleans |
dear balladeer, *heh* seems that this little work of verse strikes home a bit too well with a fella like myself... *wipes back a tear* excellent and extrordinarily moving piece... reminds me of a song by The Cure that i've grown quite fond of... a few lines from it say "i've been looking so long at these pictures of you, that i almost believe that they're real"... your poetic talent never ceases to amaze me... sincerely, a sad tomato you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you... |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Just wonderful.....Great work.....You'd have my vote for this one.... Julie :) |
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LadySofia Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 238FL., USA |
I like to deny that someday will come when I will begin to see things (and myself!)decay and die, but reality tells me otherwise. My Great Uncle is on his last throes, and this poem brought tears to my eyes. 'deer, you are a heartbreaker with your well-woven words. ^_^Amanda "Come what come may, time and the hour runs through the roughest day." A line from Macbeth, by William Shakespear |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Pure art. A sure add to the library. After all, what is reality anyway? Nothin' but a collective hunch. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
i have never read any of your other work but this poem here says it all and makes me want to read all of you. great work so keep it up. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
 Guess what balladeer, you made it into my private library (which i just discovered existed). Love your work,,, Are there other poems of yours I can read somehow? |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You were doing so good until the end and then reality won again! Yes, I would push reality aside also, for there are some possessions that are forever. Oh how we are so interconnected with some....beautiful pathos. Thanks for sharing. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This is beautifully touching...on the light note I wish I had some of those goldfish, we've replaced two in two days...poor little guys...and on the heavier note...WOW what awesome feeling you write with!! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thank you all VERY much! I appreciate all of you. linda...thank you for inviting me into your library. Others? The archives are full of them |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful writing, as always, Balladeer! Denise |
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