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The Storm Within |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Inside my heart the battle rages on < !signature-->You would think by now the feelings would be gone They just do not seem capable of dying Even though I have caught you in lying My heart still cares for you I know that will always be true It also still feels your love Like a ray of sun sent from above A little here a little there A display of tenderness so rare In between flashes of anger An oasis from the impending danger If we could only capture that feeling Lightning in a bottle we'd be stealing No longer would we hear the thunder That warns me of the spell you're under All I ask is that you open your mind I know you have been more than kind Please allow your heart to feel So we will know if this is real  Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith [This message has been edited by Lone Wolf (edited 06-17-2000).] |
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sea_of_okc Senior Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 568Oklahoma City, OK, USA |
Ah LW if this is truly a picture of the relationship you are in I cry for you... You know you deserve better Hope everything works out Hon |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Wolf, touching the heart this one you write. Coco |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sea...here have a tissue for the tears. It is what is in my heart. I deal with it by writing. I know I do. Thank you. Coco...Thank you. Not an easy one to do. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Hi LoneWolf -- wonderful piece of work! I am glad you can write and get things off your chest. ~hugs from netswan |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this was beautiful God bless you Kathleen "How do I love thee? Let me count the ways. I love thee to the depth and breadth and height My soul can reach, when feeling out of sight For the ends of Being and ideal Grace." Elizabeth Barrett Browning |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
L.W. Oh this hurts and also leaves room for hope. You have opened the door, now it is up to him to walk through it. **AWH's** My dear friend. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
wow, the title fits this poem perfectly very well written All my love, Jeffrey I lie awake in a world filled with dreams, but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Hi netswan...thank you!! Nice to see you here again!!  Irish Rose...That means a lot coming from you...thanks. BDC...My point exactly. It is out of my hands. Awe, thanks for the *AWHs*...back to you, my friend. Jeffrey...thought it was a good one. Thanks my friend. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
A little here a little there A display of tenderness so rare In between flashes of anger An oasis from the impending danger If we could only capture that feeling Lightning in a bottle we'd be stealing No longer would we hear the thunder That warns me of the spell you're under ----------------------- WOW... LW this is perfect!! and one of your strongest pieces of work.. you have totally captured the confusion and pain of a relationship that is at these crossroads... as i was reading your aching words ... i was reminded of that old cliche' "theres a fine line between love and hate"... finding our balance to walk that line is the hard part.. I know..you know...wish we didnt know.. but always...lessons learned keep healing in your writing... with each verse you get stronger later-wolfie-gator jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving (How one move just puts me by myself) There you go just trusting someone else (Now I know I put us both through hell) ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong (I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me) And I'm not sayin (We ever had the right to hold on) (I just didn't wanna let you get away from me) ~MB20~ She says baby, It's 3AM ... I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. ~MB20~ |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
It hurts to read this, to feel the pain of betrayal, to love beyond that betrayal...it touches everyone who has ever loved |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
Nice Written!!!!!!!! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
LoneWolf~ well my friend you've done it again! Touched my heart and soul ever so deeply. This is one of my favourite pieces by you. Such emotion you have weaved into this. You write your heart, we read and are touched. I hope the writing is helping you to heal. I pray that it is. Take care. Amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Ooo ---- came into vote for this one. Didn't know what those funny looking books meant when I came in and responded before! ~netswan |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
JM....Thank you very much for the kind reply. Yes, there is a very fine line there...hard one to walk at times. The crossroads are not an easy place to be, but they are necessary. There are many lessons and always healing. Later-special-gator. Paula....Thanks and it is better to have loved and lost then to never have loved at all. Vandana....Thank you! Amy....Thank you for the compliment my friend. The writing does help...it is my outlet. Happy to touch your special heart. Hope the words help you. Take care. netswan....Thanks and yes, the books threw me at first!! Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This was heart-wrenching Lone Wolf ... so many emotions so deeply from the heart. From one therapeutic pen to another ... write on! Well done Lone Wolf, wonderful submission for the book! Best wishes, /Kit |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~LW, LW, LW,....*Sigh*....what do I say? You write your heart. This is a great piece...so full of all within...it's so real and wonderfully expressed. Wishing you sunshine. Take care. *Peace. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Lone Wolf~ this is a place I can remember all too easy. I hope you heal soon, I hope things change. -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellent writing, Lone Wolf, excellent... regards, sudhir |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Kit....Yes, it is great therapy. Thank you, I hope it makes the book. SF....No words necessary my friend....I know. The sun will come....has to. SEA...Sorry to hear that. I hope I do too. Sudhir...Thank you very much. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
LOne ...you have my vote, excellant work my friend, I could feel your heartache! |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Lovely...  ~Heather |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
Hope to see you in the book with this one. great work. i'm having problems with my girlfriend cause i might be moving. so i kind of know but i still hope things get better for you. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
RH....Thank you my friend. I know you can relate in some ways. Heather....Thank you. Jeremiah....Hope things bet better for you and your girlfriend. Thanks for the vote and your reply. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ An ocean of tender emotion set forth here. Well-done, hon. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Marge~ Yes, it really is. You describe it perfectly. Thank you!! Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Really good LW. . . your best yet. . . here's my vote!!! ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This is really very good LW....lots of emotions flowing free...I liked this alot Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Lone wolf, a very powerful poem. If we could only capture that feeling Lightning in a bottle we'd be stealing No longer would we hear the thunder That warns me of the spell you're under All I ask is that you open your mind I know you have been more than kind Please allow your heart to feel So we will know if this is real a very emotional poem, I hope the storm clears and that a rainbow graces your love instead of dark clouds. wonderfully written. |
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Alexander Duke Junior Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 12 |
I read this poem and someting in me felt thirsty (perhaps for gentle touch),thats how it feels .It's a very touching poem and healing as well |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Sven . . . Thank you my friend. Wow, a vote too!! Haha. Tracie . . . Happy you liked it. Yes, many emotions to sort out. Thanks. Brian . . . Thanks, I hope so too. It will happen in time I know. Alexander . . . I think we have all felt that way at one time or another. Thank you for reading. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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