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0 posted 2000-06-17 12:23 PM


A whole new day erupts,
A needle by a thread--
The wind is pierced by drops
Of tears November bled.
The leaves swirl in their flight,
So weak and short of breath,
While reaching for new height,
They glide into the depth
Of dirty liquid skies,
Where heaven quickly smears
And echoes of their cries
Roam through deserted years.
The sad fate of the lost,--
To seek the truth in mud
When by the window crossed
The truth is hung to rot...
Just take a look outside
The skin hangs off its bones
November, crucified,
In all three voices moans...



 Check out my poetry here:


http://cafepoetry.com/stage1/andrey_kneller.htm#My%20Hamlet


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1 posted 2000-06-17 01:31 AM


Read this one carefully, there are a lot of beautiful images in this poem...
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2 posted 2000-06-17 01:54 AM


WOW!!!

This is worth repeating again

A whole new day erupts,
A needle by a thread--
The wind is pierced by drops
Of tears November bled.
The leaves swirl in their flight,
So weak and short of breath,
While reaching for new height,
They glide into the depth
Of dirty liquid skies,
Where heaven quickly smears
And echoes of their cries
Roam through deserted years.
The sad fate of the lost,--
To seek the truth in mud
When by the window crossed
The truth is hung to rot...
Just take a look outside
The skin hangs off its bones
November, crucified,
In all three voices moans...

Sorry, could NOT pick a favorite line, it is all so perfect



 All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep


Master
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since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867
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3 posted 2000-06-17 12:30 PM


Thank you Jeffrey, it means a lot to me!
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