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JulieAnn
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since 2000-06-12
Posts 754
Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!

0 posted 2000-06-16 11:23 AM


rain drops on my face
mud betwwen my toes
i must look pathetic to you
standing here
begging
pleading
wishing you would stay
dress clinging to my body
i wear nohing underneath
just the soft caresses
you left there
moments ago
you will return
to your happy home
you think she doesn't know
it isn't you i'm after  
in my eyes you'll see
it's passion that I long for
endlessly
but bored i'll get
i'll move on
you'll find another
porchlight on
did you hear me
shivering
in the night?
wanting someone
to hold me tight?
is that what brought you
to my door?
so go if you will
beg you I will no more
i've got to believe
in something more.....

 Julie :)

© Copyright 2000 Julie Ann Ferrer - All Rights Reserved
Corinne
Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167
state of confusion
1 posted 2000-06-16 11:39 AM


yes, there is something more, something real to be found...liked your poem.

Corinne

Mike
Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

2 posted 2000-06-16 02:51 PM


Nicely written. Enjoyed your poem.
ESP
Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....
3 posted 2000-06-16 04:57 PM


Beautifully expressed. I enjoyed this one.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
4 posted 2000-06-16 07:09 PM


I agree with Corinne there is something more.
a great poem. thanks for sharing.

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"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

"Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso

"We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde


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Parker
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129
ON
5 posted 2000-06-16 07:16 PM


yes, can't agree more with the above. Great poem, had my full attention.

dress clinging to my body
i wear nohing underneath

nice image.... must be the man in me...  

Parker

ParisGrl
Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610

6 posted 2000-06-16 07:18 PM


Julie,

I loved your poem.  Keep up the good writing.

ParisGrl

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