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Dose Of Reality

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JamesMichael
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0 posted 06-16-2000 07:14 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for JamesMichael

It's really real and it's not really a feeling I like to feel.   Sort of like taking a cold shower, you know all freezin cold and pleasure free.  Anyway that's the reason I titled this poem....
A DOSE OF REALITY

"Oh my goodness look how she stands out in the crowd.
Please let my presence present myself to her just as loud.
I can't wait to tell her how much I care
in anticipation of all the joy and happiness
the two of us will soon share."
Then quite abruptly a dose of reality jumps into my head
and rudely announces..."Perhaps you would like to reconsider all those thoughts you just had.
Romantic love cannot be based on how much one individual cares.
It's determined by the desires that 2 lovers eagerly want to begin to share.
All of those feelings must be mutually known
and not plans and schemes that you own alone.
You must always beware if only one hopes and cares
cause the luster will vanish quickly into the night air.
leaving only a loss of tranquility in the place where you hoped someone would stand who cares."
And once again you'll sadly hear a Dose of Reality as it screams
"Love does not really exist as it seems,
Love only lives in hopes and dreams."

Jameslee@June16,2000

I was thinking about Love and mutual attractions.  I have written at least 12 poems on this subject and than I read Janet's "Lessons of a Butterfly"
and Marina made a comment about how "Love is not always a two way street."
And this is a real truth about Love.
When we give Love, we don't always get love back.
And it seems to me that is a TRAGEDY.
Does love have any value if the object of our affection rejects our Love?
Must love be a loss of tranquility and another Dose Of Reality?




[This message has been edited by jmlee12345 (edited 06-16-2000).]
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Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 06-16-2000 07:26 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

James
These are the very fears of being in love...that exactly is why people find it difficult to declare their love. Questions you put forward are those which I keep asking myself, and yet have not found most satisfyingt answers... but then, life is a quest, and the quest is for life...
"Does love have any value if the object of our affection rejects our Love?
Must love be a loss of tranquility and another Dose Of Reality?"
.......
Very thought provoking writing James...

Regards, and take care my friend,
sudhir
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2 posted 06-16-2000 10:11 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

James~ this is a fantastic poem!   Love is never50/50.... my parents tried to teach me that....they have been married a long time 30+ years.... and they are right, someone is giving more because the other one needs it, then the tide turns and the other one gives more. It's a partnership,if you love enough to ride the tides it's gonna make it. Just have to find the one that will ride with you! I hope you do.   -SEA
JamesMichael
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3 posted 06-16-2000 03:57 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Thank you Sudhir and Sea for your understanding and special words to me.  James
Marina
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4 posted 06-16-2000 04:15 PM       View Profile for Marina   Email Marina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marina

james I think you speak true words here my friend.  But all is not losted, I think REAL love can, will, and does exsist.  It all lies within the heart and soul of two people who were placed on this earth to be together.  There is truly someone for you James.  I believe beyond a shadow of a doubt!!!!!!  

Take care my friend,

Hugs.....
Marina
Eskendale
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5 posted 06-16-2000 04:32 PM       View Profile for Eskendale   Email Eskendale   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eskendale

I believe that many things in life are sad, yet beautiful. One of the beautiful things that brings me a smile is to read poetry from someone like yourself and reflect on the enchanting piece of work. The sadness of love may be being a one way course, but the beauty of the ideality of love can be worth it, no?
Andrew Scott
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6 posted 06-16-2000 07:00 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Here is a story that I think answers your question about love being worth something when you get none of it back.  Sorry if it seems to long to post here, but I thought it was worth the space.  Enjoy.  PS... I liked the read.  Well done.

One day, a young woman was standing in the middle of the town,
proclaiming that she had the most beautiful heart in all the valley.
A large crowd gathered and they all admired the heart for it was perfect.
So smooth and unblemished, there was not a mark or a flaw in it. Yes,
they all agreed. It was the most beautiful heart they had ever seen.
The young woman was very proud, and boasted even more loudly about her
beautiful heart.

Suddenly, an old woman appeared at the front of the crowd and said quietly,
Why, your heart is not nearly as beautiful as mine.  The young woman and the
crowd looked at the older woman's heart. It was beating strongly, but it was
full of scars. It had places where it  appeared that pieces had been removed
and other pieces put in, but they didn't fit quite right and there were
several jagged edges. In fact, in some places they were deep where whole
pieces were missing. The people stared. How can she say her heart is more
beautiful, they thought?

The young woman looked at the old woman's heart and saw its condition.
She laughed. You must be joking, she said. Compare your heart with mine. Mine
is quite perfect and yours is a mess of wounds and scars.

Yes, said the old woman. Yours is perfect-looking, but I would never trade
with you. You see, every scar represents a person to whom I have given my
love. Many times I've torn out a piece of my heart and given it to them.
Often, they give me a piece of their heart which fits into the empty places
in my heart. But sometimes the pieces aren't exact and I have some rough
edges, which I cherish, because they remind me of the love we've shared.

Sometimes, I have given pieces of my heart away and the other person hasn't
returned a piece of theirs. These are the deep gouges. Giving love is taking
a chance.  Although, these gouges are painful, they stay open to remind me of
the love I have for these people, too. I hope someday they may return and
fill the spaces I have waiting.  So now do you see what true beauty of the
heart really is?

The young woman stood silently with tears running down her cheeks. She walked
up to the old woman, reached into her perfect, young, and beautiful heart and
ripped out a piece. She offered it to the old woman with trembling hands. The
old woman took the offering and placed it in her heart. Then she took a piece
from her own old, scarred heart and placed it in the wound of the young
woman's heart. It fit, but not perfectly, leaving some jagged edges.

The young woman looked at her heart, not perfect anymore but more beautiful
than ever, for now love from the old woman's heart flowed into her. They
embraced and walked away, side by side.

~ Author Unknown
ParisGrl
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7 posted 06-16-2000 07:22 PM       View Profile for ParisGrl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ParisGrl

James,

This poem speaks volumes to me.  I loved every second of it.  It makes one think, Is my love worth giving if the one i love rejects it?  Deep thoughts my friend.

Laura
ethome
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8 posted 06-16-2000 09:03 PM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

A Dose Of Reality - but you worded it in such  a wonderful way. Great descriptions imbued with romantic truth.
JamesMichael
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9 posted 06-17-2000 04:32 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Marina thank you for your sweet and gentle words.  You know I do Love Lena and I told her last night that I wanted to be her friend, and she said don't I love her anymore, and I told her I still love her but I want to first be her friend and get to know her and grow to love her.  Wish me luck because I really don't know how to approach a relationship from this position...I usually move much more quickly. If a woman doesn't get intimate with me I don't feel like she cares for me..but I want to start as a friend and win or lose based on my friendship.  
Eskendale I thank you for the beautiful words you have shared with me..glad that this touched you.
Andrew a very interesting and touching story.
I do believe in love...my frustration is showing because I find myself falling in love again and I have a fear of falling in love all by myself...I don't want to do that again so I am trying to approach this relationship as a friendship but I am still hoping that we will fall in love together.  I don't mind the long post, I appreciated the message and it is a positive and loving message.
ParisGirl I am still wondering that myself..I wonder if it is worth it and wonder why I am so determined to give it..why do I want to love Lena so much when I am still so unsure of her desires...a wise man would move much more slowly...and begin with a friendship...but I have never succeeded yet...so maybe its time I approached a relationship from this angle..I have been telling my heart to cool down and be patient...its too soon to go so far.
Thank you ethome for your wonderful response.
Glad you enjoyed this.  I appreciate every wonderful response...you have softened my heart.   James
Aimster
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10 posted 06-17-2000 05:17 PM       View Profile for Aimster   Email Aimster   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Aimster

James
this was powerful and wonderful!
my friend, you ask some very good and
thought provoking questions. i am like
you...always falling in love so fast
and often times alone. though i have been
hurt a few times and im in the process
right now of a similar situation (the
one i love doesn't exactly feel the same)
i have learned to love someone who doesn't
love you is still better than to never have
loved at all. all of our downfalls as well
as our triumphs in love as all aspects of
our life make us who we are. I truly hope
that you and Lena's friendship turns into
a wonderful romance full of the love you
both deserve.
take care.
amy  

"Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."



brian madden
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11 posted 06-17-2000 06:00 PM       View Profile for brian madden   Email brian madden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for brian madden

Love does not really exist as it seems,
Love only lives in hopes and dreams.

James a wonderful poem especially the last two lines. LOve is  never simple, it involves a lot of risks and fate, I guess that is what makes true love so special. really enjoyed the poem.


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"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

"Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso

"We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde


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Janet Marie
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12 posted 06-18-2000 01:42 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

SBJ...
Im way behind on my posts...but im here now
that any of my words inspired you pleases me greatly...
but i wish to disagree...
love does really exist ...
it just may come to us in a way we dont expect...
never give up on love...
you may find it...it may find you ...
usually when we least expect it ...
but almost always ...when we NEED it MOST ...
the true lesson of my butterfly
keep reaching for the stars SBJ ones got your name on it.
later-sweet-gator
jm
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13 posted 06-18-2000 04:59 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

James, this is such a thoughtful piece of writing... poetry indeed from your heart. If it is love that you share with your ladyfriend, a slower pace with her may bring it to the surface. I commend you for being so careful with your exploration of love.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


JamesMichael
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14 posted 06-18-2000 04:22 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Amy thank you for your hope.  It is my desire to fall in love with Lena and for Lena to fall in love with me.  More enjoyable...less painful that way...yes.
Brian the risk always seems worth it in the beginning but if heartache and disappointments follow I sometimes wonder.
Janet, dear sweet Janet, I need it most right now...see how patiently I wait for love.  I believe I will find love and most importantly love will find me.  Perhaps love is looking for me just as eagerly as I am searching for love.
Claire you made my heart race when you said a slower pace may bring it to the surface.  This has been exactly my thoughts..and she has said no pressure...let it come from the heart.   My anticipation, longing, desires, can only unite with a willing heart.   Loved the responses.   James
JamesMichael
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15 posted 06-15-2004 04:15 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Interesting thoughts...James
 
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