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Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 2000-06-16 07:08 AM


Drifting

Sadness
creeps
around
tripping
to the
ground
useless,
clinging
to chance
drifting
away
in distance.

Nobody
to anyone
important
just
an animal
defiant
seeking
acceptance
by all
drifting
into
free fall.



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Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
1 posted 2000-06-16 07:16 AM


Free-fall
Exhilarates,
Brings a
Rush in
This blood,
Thoughts
Fleeting
Drifting
Off sad
Shores
Into a
Wide
Ocean

Sailing
In solitude
Calming
Sea-line
Dolphins
Jumping,
Visual
Delight
Another
Rush in
This blood
As I jump
Into the water
To waltz
With
Dolphins…

Drifted
Alone
I visited
Heaven
Paradise
Regained,
Troubles
Drifted
Away.
........

Oooopppppppssssssss

Sorry for all these words Lost Dreamer...I just drifted with the theme that you came up with and experienced a most enjoyable sail...

Thanks...

Regards, sudhir

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
2 posted 2000-06-16 07:36 AM


Sudhir: Your sail was enjoyable to me also. Thank you for the enlightenment.  
wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)
3 posted 2000-06-16 07:45 AM


good job losty i enjoyed it
Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
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Somewhere near the Rainbow
4 posted 2000-06-16 09:39 PM


Walt: Thank you kind Sir, glad you enjoyed.  
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997
northern mountains, Idaho
5 posted 2000-06-16 10:38 PM


Oh, aching.  I've been there.  But the idea of free fall is one I've never come up with.  Brilliant. Too sad.  Too real.  Thank you for sharing.  Sometimes I need to cry.

doreen peri
Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
6 posted 2000-06-16 10:43 PM


great lines, here, gloria...

"just
an animal
defiant
seeking
acceptance
by all
drifting
into
free fall."

crushing, pertinent, very real! Thanks for the read... well done, m'friend!

dp

Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

7 posted 2000-06-17 08:25 AM


I can relate to these feelings. Well written, Gloria!

Denise

brian madden
Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
8 posted 2000-06-17 08:42 AM


Nobody
to anyone
important
just
an animal
defiant
seeking
acceptance
by all
drifting
into
free fall.

wow...quite sad but beautifully written. excellent poem.



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"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

"Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso

"We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde


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Dennis L. White
Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463
Michigan, U.S.A.
9 posted 2000-06-17 01:25 PM


Gloria,
  WOW, an explosion of thought bytes, each powerful alone, combined, WOW!
Dennis :^)

Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464
Somewhere near the Rainbow
10 posted 2000-06-17 05:33 PM


Thank you all most kindly for your replies, I appreciate very much.  
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