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whiskey
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0 posted 2000-06-15 09:53 PM


"  Changing of a Day  "

I look outside, Through window
Gray bleakness, Blankets the day
Storm clouds roll, across the sky
Thunder sounds, clashing loudly
In distance lightning cracks
On the ground rain drops pound
Giving of a wonderous smell
That soothing sound as they fall
Faraway the blue sky is torn
Drying the path, shining warmth
Opening flowers , giving them life
Birds now flying, fluttering wet feathers dry
A lovely newness to a day once so black
The Dark clouds have passed
The thunder now distantly sounding
Lightning non existant, gone
Sunshine coming forth, warming my face
Through window , once cold and gray
Amazed are my eyes
How quickly a day can change



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1 posted 2000-06-15 10:05 PM


Whiskey~ this is great! You described it perfect.   -SEA
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2 posted 2000-06-16 04:11 PM


~You have painted a most amazing picture in my mind with your words. Wonderful!!! Take care. *Peace.
brian madden
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3 posted 2000-06-16 07:22 PM


a beautiful and very vivid picture.

Opening flowers , giving them life
Birds now flying, fluttering wet feathers dry
A lovely newness to a day once so black
The Dark clouds have passed

wonderful,  

Lightning non existant, gone
Sunshine coming forth, warming my face
Through window , once cold and gray
Amazed are my eyes
How quickly a day can change

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"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

"Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso

"We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde


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Mike
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4 posted 2000-06-16 08:35 PM


Nicely written.  Enjoyed your poem.
Aimster
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5 posted 2000-06-16 11:06 PM


beautiful poem! this was seen
clearly in my mind as i read it.
excellent!
take care,
amy  

 "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




peppermint35
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6 posted 2000-06-16 11:22 PM


I felt it and saw it through your words.. excellent work.

 Peppermint
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