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Mike
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since 1999-06-19

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0 posted 2000-06-15 03:48 PM

Upon a far and distant knoll,
...encased in Luna's glow,
Sings fair maiden of the lea,
...unto lush fields below,
Calling out to evening's breeze,
...take me in your arms,
And carry me to heaven's far,
...enwrapped within your charms,
Far beyond the oceans deep,
...beyond the mountains high,
Until we reach the Southern Cross,
...and with the angels fly.

No answer from lush fields below,
...as silent lays the night,
A rising mist from forth the moor,
...erases heaven's light.
Upon the cheek of maiden fair,
...a solitary tear,
'Mid haunting echoes of her call,
...too soft for mortal ear.
Where have you gone, my gentle wind,
...do not you hear my song?
Am I forsaken by my love,
...forever shall I long?

From out the mist, comes whispered breath,
...forever you'll be mine,
Your beauty is rare chalice gold,
...filled with the sweetest wine,
I've searched four corners of the earth,
...to sate my passion's fire,
On a far and distant knoll,
...have found my heart's desire.
Take my hand and sail with me,
...unto the stars above,
As I whisper in your ear,
...you are my life, my love.

Young lovers walk 'neath slivered moon,
...on sultry summer eve,
In meadow lush, beneath far knoll,
...seeking wind's reprieve.
A fog ascends from nearby moor,
...and swallows strolling pair,
Blotting out the stars above,
...with suffocating air.
Lost within dark wall of mist,
...canyon of the night,
Calling out for evening's breeze,
...return of heaven's light.

A cooling breeze from forth the south,
...sweeps away dark mist,
Young lovers feel of cooling wind,
...as by its freshness kissed.
In sky above the stars are freed,
...to shine their heavenly grace,
Beneath the glow of Luna's orb,
...in passion, pair embrace.
As gaze upon the Southern Cross,
...in welkin sky above,
Young lovers hear on whispering wind,
...you are my life, my love.

brian madden
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ireland

1 posted 2000-06-15 03:55 PM

A cooling breeze from forth the south,
...sweeps away dark mist,
Young lovers feel of cooling wind,
...as by its freshness kissed.
In sky above the stars are freed,
...to shine their heavenly grace,
Beneath the glow of Luna's orb,
...in passion, pair embrace.
As gaze upon the Southern Cross,
...in welkin sky above,
Young lovers hear on whispering wind,
...you are my life, my love.

A magical tale you spin, T'is a legend that should be sung throughout the land... sorry, I don't get out much.

wonderful poem.

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Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

"Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso

"We Irish are too poetical to be poets, we are a nation of brilliant failures" Oscar Wilde

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Munda
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2 posted 2000-06-15 03:56 PM

Mike ! I don't know what to say....You leave me without words ! G.....love it !

Marge Tindal

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3 posted 2000-06-15 05:46 PM

Mike~
This is a perfectly enchanting poem.
Lilting refrain of the lea ...
lovely.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Nan

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4 posted 2000-06-15 05:50 PM

"You are my life, my love..."... simply awesome, Mike..

SEA

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5 posted 2000-06-15 05:55 PM

Mike~ this is wonderfully romantic! I like this very much!

-SEA

Sudhir Iyer
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6 posted 2000-06-15 06:13 PM

As gaze upon the Southern Cross,
...in welkin sky above,
Young lovers hear on whispering wind,
...you are my life, my love.

..........

A truly mesmerising poem here, Mike...
Muchly enjoyed reading this one...

Regards, sudhir

Mike
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7 posted 2000-06-15 11:49 PM

Brian... appreciate the comment.  Glad you enjoyed.
Munda..*smile*  you said a great deal... Thank you.
Marge... thank you ever so much for the gracious comment.
Nan...  an awesome from Nan... wooo hooo
SEA.. and I thank you very much for the reply..
Sudhir... Thank you kindly sir for the favorable comment.

Kit McCallum

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8 posted 2000-06-16 07:16 AM

Absolutely took my breath away Mike ... your flow and rhythm were positively superb, and the story itself ... magical and enchanting! Loved this!

Best wishes,
/Kit

A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart

9 posted 2000-06-16 11:10 AM

WOW! mike this is so beautiful, like a painting, I stand in awe, admiring your talent, you have gave me goosebumps once again! loved it! bravo!

JulieAnn
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10 posted 2000-06-16 11:14 AM

I have to agree You are very talented..and this was very mesmerizing....I can't say it any better than the rest.....Great work here!

Julie :)

Mike
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11 posted 2000-06-16 02:44 PM

Kit, Ms. Heart and JulieAnn... I sincerely thank you for the gracious comments. They are appreciated.

poetFemmeFatale
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12 posted 2000-06-16 03:42 PM

You leave me no choice, but to drag out my Thesarus and find something that attempts to come close to "talent", "breathtaking", "superb", "magical".....wow. LOL This is the style I love most of yours...the content, the way you put it down on screen, the whole thing entirely. The rhyme scheme has a tendency to sweep the reader away....I just don't have the words to describe your writing ability. I'm amazed. Better go before I get too mushy, and before your head gets bigger than it already is! LOL

You already know you're beyond "good".

Andrew Scott
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13 posted 2000-06-16 03:51 PM

Mike: What a find this one is. Most excellent writing. I'll be on the look out for more. Thanks for sharing.

Mike
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14 posted 2000-06-16 06:56 PM

Ms. Fatale... thesarus... is that related to a Pegasuaras?  *smile*  I'll try and not let my head get too big...hehe... although I am glad I have my plow boots on...lol
seriously... glad you liked...
Mr. Scott...  you see Ian per chance?  if so.. could you send him home, he got chased off by a maurauding monkey...
thanks for the reply...

Andrew Scott
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Redlands,CA,USA

15 posted 2000-06-16 07:23 PM

LOL! Ya, I've seen him... In fact Ian is with me right now. I picked him in Scotland on our way back to the 'Stute. Red and I should be there in a few days. Should you happen to visit the 'Stute before we get there, please have those yahoos stay out of my kitchen. I've got some serious cookin' to do and I don't need to find my metal colander being used in shock therapy. Much more my frying pans used as bed pans. Thanks, and remember you Prozac.

Denise

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16 posted 2000-06-17 08:22 AM

Very beautiful, Mike!

Denise

Jan
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17 posted 2000-06-18 11:04 PM

This was so good I'm not sure what to say. You have an amazing gift.

A Romantic Heart
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Forever In Your Heart

18 posted 2000-06-19 04:26 PM

oh I just had to read it again and again, so lovely, up to the top again! so talented you are sir mike!

linda munday
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19 posted 2000-06-19 09:13 PM

Mike,
I think I will have to have your poems as my sustenance each day... Absolutely fantastic.
Lilting, haunting, celtic, magical feel about it.
Your extremely talented.

X Angel
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since 1999-11-07

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Oregon

20 posted 2000-06-19 09:21 PM

Ok so I am the first to admit I am a sucker for romance, but wow did you ever grab me by the heart and yank me into this poem! I was entranced from the first stanza to the last.
You have an incredible gift for words and I am slowly attempting to read more of your awesome work!
I really loved the sort of medieval feel to this, anything medieval always gets me....tis a good Irish girlie I am...with a smattering of Scot for good measure...though I reside in Oregon, my heart and soul are ever far away on a romantic isle.

Kudos Sir Mike on a triumphant piece of poetry. Might I also suggest a submission to the Passions book?
~Heather

Elizabeth

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21 posted 2000-06-19 09:23 PM

Magical, mystical, beautiful, and wonderful! I printed this one to add to my collection. Thanks Mike.

Elizabeth

I'm grabbing my hat and coat
I'm leaving the cat a note
Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town!

Martie

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22 posted 2000-06-22 11:35 PM

Wonderful, magical romantic...perfectly told. BRAVO!!!!

Meadowmuse
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23 posted 2000-06-23 12:40 PM

This piece is timeless, tender...the likes of which are seldom seen in modern poetry. Please accept my earnest admiration for your outstanding and unfeigned ability to cast the reader back to a more gentle time and place. Such a beautiful poem...

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Mike
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24 posted 2000-06-23 11:41 AM

Thank you all ever so much for the exceedingly gracious replies. I truly appreciate the comments, to know you have enjoyed my poetry.

Butterflies_dont_cry
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Michigan

25 posted 2000-11-22 11:41 PM

Mike* I can certainly understand why this
would be a favorite of yours and I'm sure
you will understand why I needed to add it
to my library...thank you so much for
directing me this way...it's truly stunning~

You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~

wayoutwalt
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26 posted 2000-11-22 11:58 PM

woohoo i followed bdc in here and i am so glad i did!! mike you are just a grand poet you are you are

Elizabeth

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27 posted 2001-05-09 11:33 PM

Read this again, and it brought back sweet memories....so once again, Mike, well done.

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