This is pretty tame, so this piece should be left in the Open poetry forum. Well said!
Although some words, were a little risque, I understand why you felt that you had to use them to prove your point. Isn't it a shame that women, especially teenage girls go to such great lengths to find love or beauty.
I absolutely loved the last lines:
with the cool hot rod
He's more important to her than finding
This says so much, I am sure that even God himself is wondering this as he is shaking his head at some of us women.
Excellent piece! I wonder if Brian and I have started something with our poetry?
If so, great, we all need to talk about this important issue and the issues related to it.
If you have time, please read:
"Candy Heart" by Brian Madden
"Maybelline Eyes" and "Prisoner" By Me
[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 06-18-2000).]