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Out Of Time |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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It was an early evening full moon and the sky was burning up and the sunset fell away at last when the big globe had enough. And the last light spilled like whiskey across the rooftop of the world and tried to fight the coming night by shining on the purple swirls. And it was heavens above ignited firey fingers spread abound and I really felt excited as I stopped and looked around. So I sat down on the silver sand and listened to the sounds of the waves rolling in and out washing little toys aground. And the air was fresh and clean and I sure was feeling good on the silver sand in another land where a man can eclipse his mood. And as I sat there watching the moonlit ocean and the sky I felt the sea winds rush in and I was glad to be alive. My heart could feel no finer beyond my lonely side when a distant voice came to me with words about the night and when I looked up at her she stepped back in the light I could see that she was beautiful in her mellow years of life. I thought she looked quite lonely so I smiled to look alive I said I was lost in peace would she care to spend some time. With uncertain moves she sat down and I looked into her eyes and they were bright like beacons sending warnings to my mind and I felt my heartbeat storming while I struggled with the time. She said, "if you want someone to talk to I can spend some time I know all about moonlit nights and dreams that never die and people never run out of dreams they just run out of time. She talked until a tear appeared so I gave her story some room and she spoke her sorrows on the night to release her from some gloom. She said she'd left the worst part back somewhere in the dark and as the truth flowed from her I almost came apart. The moonlight shone down on her as she twisted her feet in the sand it was a kind of time so lonely that I held her trembling hand. I just could not believe it or imagine how she could feel and while I tried to comfort her she seemed so earthly real. Somehow she was in my arms so swiftly her fears swelling from the heart and she wept just like a baby feeling safe there from harm. I wanted to take care fo her so she'd feel understood so I took her back to my place where I could lighten up her mood. She laid back and her eyelids sagged until her tears were gone she said that she felt better and that she'd soon be moving on. Well she felt weightless with no past drag when her long fingers stroked my sides and when we kissed her breath was wet and she let out a thousand sighs. As she lay there calm and beautiful I knew she'd been too kind and the only pain she'd ever feel is when she went back in her mind. She said, "if you want someone to talk to I can spend some time, I know all about moonlit nights and dreams that never die, and people don't run out of dreams they just run out of time. Celtrue2000@E3B1G9 |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is fantastic! Very well written! Denise |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Denise! |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~OMG,....I so love this. hehe. Truly though,...it swept me up and held me tight through the whole thing. WOW!!! This is so awesome. Indeed a most superb piece of poetry. Take care. *Peace. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ My stars ! This is an absolutely WONDERFUL piece of writing. It flowed with easy-remembering. I believe I've not seen finer from your pen. You are in touch with a magical muse ... and your heart is singing. I like the tune. Superb ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"and people never run out of dreams they just run out of time." "and the only pain she'd ever feel is when she went back in her mind." The lines above nearly took my breath away ... wonderful thought-provoking lines Ethome! The whole verse is truly enchanting and magical ... well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
It was an early evening full moon and the sky was burning up and the sunset fell away at last when the big globe had enough. And the last light spilled like whiskey across the rooftop of the world and tried to fight the coming night by shining on the purple swirls. And it was heavens above ignited firey fingers spread abound and I really felt excited ---------------- And the air was fresh and clean and I sure was feeling good on the silver sand in another land where a man can eclipse his mood. And as I sat there watching the moonlit ocean and the sky I felt the sea winds rush in and I was glad to be alive. My heart could feel no finer beyond my lonely side when a distant voice came to me with words about the night and when I looked up at her she stepped back in the light I could see that she was beautiful in her mellow years of life. -------------- She talked until a tear appeared so I gave her story some room and she spoke her sorrows on the night to release her from some gloom. She said she'd left the worst part back somewhere in the dark and as the truth flowed from her I almost came apart. The moonlight shone down on her as she twisted her feet in the sand it was a kind of time so lonely that I held her trembling hand. -------------- Well she felt weightless with no past drag when her long fingers stroked my sides and when we kissed her breath was wet and she let out a thousand sighs. As she lay there calm and beautiful I knew she'd been too kind and the only pain she'd ever feel is when she went back in her mind. She said, "if you want someone to talk to I can spend some time, I know all about moonlit nights and dreams that never die, and people don't run out of dreams they just run out of time. ------------- this is AMAZING .... I am just stunned and swept by this exquisite piece of writing... the imagery is astonishing but the emotions are what captivated me. take a bow for this one poet sir ...you deserve it take care jm |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you for your kind words - Spitfire, Marge, Kit and Janet. They are very encouraging. I will be visiting you as soon as possible. E. Lewis True (ethome) |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Beautiful crafted piece of work here ethome and I really liked the final verse.  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is really a fine piece of writing.I thooroughly enjoyed sinking my teeth into this one. Good work here  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
great lines here... "and people never run out of dreams they just run out of time." and "and the only pain she'd ever feel is when she went back in her mind." really very well done... enjoyed this much thanks for the read |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Munda, Balladeer and Doreen, much appreciated. |
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notlikely2 Member
since 2000-06-16
Posts 308UK |
What a wonderful poem Ethome. I was really there with you. Inspiring! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Captivating...and a fantastic read. I'll read this again tomorrow cause it is special. James |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
THank you notlikely2 and jmlee 12345 for the encouraging comments. Much appreciated. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Beautiful, I loved the desscriptive words, the detail, I could feel , see, and hear your poem...wow!  |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Ethome~ This is amazing...really touched my heart. Excellent! -SEA |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much, A Romantic Heart and Sea. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Enjoyed the read... a well painted picture. Kudos! and thanks for sharing. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Wonderfully done with such feeling and grace!! Thank you so much for sharing this!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Andrew and Butterflies I will be around to visit you soon. |
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