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Slashed soul
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since 2000-03-29
Posts 86
England

0 posted 2000-06-14 03:36 PM


I was lost when not embraced by your arms
you stole my heart with your charms
I never knew how deeply I had fallen in love
until I hit the bottom.

laughing, crying, flying along with you
our love thicker than glue
Beg you on my knees
claw at your door
Look at me baby, tell me you don't want me any more.

Advice from the gods
go for gold
thrown away what I was told
Laydown the rules
born to be true
I want you.

Planets turn, worlds collide
we fought side by side
looking forward
feeling free
you are my oak tree.


-Rich-



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Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
1 posted 2000-06-15 08:27 PM


Hi slashed soul,

Well you had me thinking your poem was about a women, but im not sure, I really like it and would love you to tell me what I missed or don't understand if you would please?

Love,  Cerenity

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2 posted 2000-06-15 10:21 PM


SS~ this is touching, sweet and yet sad. Great poem.   -SEA
SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
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3 posted 2000-06-15 10:27 PM


~Slashed Soul,...first off,...your name there (not the title,...your screename) says so much....like you're hurting in some way. Keep writing...you do it well.  This poem expresses so much,...such a sad and longing piece of poetry.  You've expressed well and thank you for sharing this little piece of you with us.  Take care. *Peace.
Slashed soul
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since 2000-03-29
Posts 86
England
4 posted 2000-06-15 11:01 PM


I thank you all for your words.

My name reflects my inner sorrow I feel everyday. I can push it away, but the tide is strong and returns.

My wife left me, I have been round the mill of love, affairs and lusts of the flesh, and now I lost it all. It hurts real bad,and I move onwards everday, but this will never take away the fact that I gave my heart to some wonderful women, who I loved immensly..but sadly they fade to dust.

*if i have something to share, read this- always kiss and make up, always talk to your love.....and when you see them sat down just stop and think how much you love them, and tell them- TELL THEM THAT YOU LOVE THEM!!!!


*infact- if you read this, you spend too much time on the PC, and should spend time hugging your other half- who sits alone and needs you - so go and give her/him a kiss  )*-there I have said my piece"!!!

-Rich-

learning is hard, without experience.
rp00


[This message has been edited by Slashed soul (edited 06-15-2000).]

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