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Open Poetry #8

Don't have a title help me please

Silent soul
Member

since 2000-06-10

Posts 73
tx,usa

0 posted 2000-06-14 12:19 PM

Pleae help me with a title and tell what you think of it. Heres two title i came up with pick from this "Why can't i just see" or "Another typical man"

I love him so
I dont wanna let go

He's been there for me
Why cant i just see

Everyday is the same
I have no one to blame

What did i do wrong
To make him stay gone so long

Why cant I just see
Hes no longer here for me

I loved him to death
But he took mu last breath

I just dont wanna think and I can!
Hes just another typical MAN!

bye 4 now
Silent

Irie
Senior Member

since 1999-12-01

Posts 1493
Washington State

1 posted 2000-06-14 01:15 PM

I would simply call this "Why"

I gave my everything to you
And you threw it to the wind
Slowly I pick up the pieces
Wondering if my heart will mend

A new day will dawn
Where I'll find love true
Then I'll be set free
From the pain inflicted by you

It's never easy to let one go that you love.
But the sooner you do, the less pain you'll endure!

Well expressed SS!

~Sheri

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2000-06-14 01:50 PM

I llke the sentiments here....are all guys like this? Perhaps the wrong one for you...need to find one who accepts you and thinks you are special...not always easy to do....some guys aren't ready to commit until months and years have gone by...so it requires patience and the ability to know when to move on and try another. I suggest "Last Breath" for a title. James

Kit McCallum

Administrator

Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2000-06-15 07:50 AM

Quite emotional thoughts you've penned Silent Soul ... I really liked Jame's suggestion above for a title! Well done.

Best wishes,
/Kit

angelswing
Senior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

4 posted 2000-06-15 07:57 AM

Nice poem, I'd call it ' Last loves Loss ' . As no one benifits from the situation you are describing and two people spliting up is generaly a loss to love itself and the peace that surrounds us .
L.of.L. Tom .

Insanity is a perfectly normal responce to an abnormal world -R.D.Laing.-

Rosebud1229
Senior Member

since 2000-04-05

Posts 1813
North Carolina

5 posted 2000-06-15 11:10 PM

very beautiful poem, I believe I would call it---- This can't be Love ------

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