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Friendship Lost |
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Syntax Junior Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 25 |
So strange how friendships ebb and flow, Some staying true, more merely shallow. I once was one of a group of friends, Now it all slowly has come to an end, Do I miss them? Of course, though it seems, That these friendships meant much less to them than to me. Does it hurt? Yes, it does, an empty space left, That each one occupied within this now bereft Mind full now only of memories fond, Of promises made, and of broken bonds, Through knowing them, though, knowledge I've gained, So all is not lost, yet there is still the pain, And the wishing for time to turn itself back, Perhaps then I could fix what went wrong, what we lacked. I doubt that I will ever completely forget, The comraderie felt within that safety net. syntax |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
Syntax, Welcome to Passions! You chose a fine first entry, one which I truly enjoyed. Friends grow and sometimes grow apart. I often miss the security of my old friends as well. The ones who are true never really leave and those who do have still helped make who you are today. Again, welcome. I trust you will make some new friends here. Trew. I have been to see the world. Tasted life at every turn. And all the time your face came back to haunt me. -Chris DeBurgh |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Oh,...this is so honest and right from the heart it seems. Good to hear you atleast say that although there is pain, that all is not lost. Very wise of you to take from it and learn. Hold onto your memories and know that all we meet and share a part of our life with help to shape the person we are today. Lovely poem. Thank you for sharing this piece of you. Take care. *Peace. *BTW,...please excuse my rudeness,...I failed to mention that I welcome you here. Goodness me. WELCOME!!!  .[This message has been edited by SpitFire (edited 06-14-2000).] |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
Well Syntax, The pain of you loss is very evednet. You expressed yourself well with this poem. Let me just say Welcome to Passions and I KNOW you will find many friends here! ~Sheri |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
You are well come, indeed -- I echo the greeting extended by my comrades ... What caught my attention in this piece was the initial image established in the first two lines -- the analogy of friendship as a body of water -- "ebb amd flow ... some merely shallow." I admit that I was expecting to see that image developed in the following stanza, but even so, the remainder of the verse was well-constructed and deserving of the accord here offered. I look forward to reading your future works ...  --Kess YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Syntax~ Welcome to Passion's friendly family. Yes, it would seem that some friendships 'ebb and flow' .... but the nicest thing about the tide of friendship is that it often returns in waves that will sweep us off our feet. Cherish the friendships and keep within their warm waters. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~syntax welcome to passions! this is a wonderful first piece and way to enter the forum. friendships come and go, but the memories always remain. take from the good, and let go of the bad. i know easier said than done. but that is what i have learned in life...the little i do know  beautiful work. take care. amy "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Syntax, Welcome to Passions!!! Friends are those rare people who stick by you no matter what may come. They are wonderful. Treasure those memories. If they are your true friends, they are never far....only a phone call away. Nice one for your first post. Looking forward to more. Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Syntax Junior Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 25 |
To all of you who posted a reply, Thanx for your "Welcomes", and also for compliments made on this poem. I sincerely appreciate your kindness. Syntax Now we'll break the code and go beyond... ~ Catherine Bowman |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Syntax, Much feeling is felt within your words, Although these lost friends dont seem to be the sort of friends that you need, I am sorry for your sadness, But look forward and see the new friendships you can make and keep Welcome to passions |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You've made a wonderful entry to our community of friends! I look forward to reading more from you. Please check your email for a special message.  |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hello, Syntax - a cognomen aptly chosen, it seems - This is a well-written poetic piece - I'm looking forward to reading more as well... Welcome to our Passionately hallowed walls...  |
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Syntax Junior Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 25 |
whiskey, Poet deVine, and Nan, Thank-you for the warm welcome! The comments on my poem deserve another thank-you. I'm very glad that you enjoyed it, and I look forward to reading your works also. Thanx again, Syntax Each instant comes with a price ~ J. Wright |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passion Syntax! You've expressed the emotions of growing apart in frienships very beautifully. Such sadness can be felt in your words, and yet such beauty in the memories ... well done! Best wishes, /Kit |
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CeruleanBlue New Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 3 |
Your words have much feeling, definantly easy to relate to. Keep up the good work! |
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