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Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
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0 posted 2000-06-13 10:31 PM





I always try to give you my all and do my best
But everyday you send but another proving test

Show you I love you with what I do and say
But your ever doubting words are thrown my way

All the teasting hoops I’ve jumped with care
What if I stopped giving for you, Would I dare?

Is the love for who I am or for what I do
For you never offer so much as a “thank you”

I’ve made up my mind, I’m done giving for good
It’s time for ME to start living just like I should

My chance will come the next time you call
I’ll tell you to find someone else to pad your fall

You call as if on cue, but I don’t Care!
With my voice so strong, I hear myself say......

"ok, I’ll be right there"”



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Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
1 posted 2000-06-13 10:35 PM


butterflies dc~
i have been here my friend. know
this feeling all too well. great
poem as always! we often times say
we are done with something, and all
the while we know we aren't. i hope
you find the strength to overcome
all this pain and hurt.  
take care.
amy

 "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




JulieAnn
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since 2000-06-12
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Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!
2 posted 2000-06-13 10:44 PM


I have lived the life you write about for many years...and yes my time HAS come and I am TRUELY done......for all the worng reason but never the less....nice work..... Julie

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-06-13 11:09 PM




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But your ever doubting words are thrown my way
----------------
For you never offer so much as a “thank you”

I’ve made up my mind, I’m done giving for good
It’s time for ME to start living just like I should
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You call as if on cue, but I don’t Care!
With my voice so strong, I hear myself say......

"ok, I’ll be right there"”
-----------
SAY IT WITH ME NOW >>>>
you know...that I know...
that you know...I KNOW ...*sigh*

wish i could tell ya i didnt ...
wish i could tell ya i dont no more ...
but i dont like to lie ...
i know...you know

some day we'll look back on all this and just laugh...(not)

BUTTERFLIES AND BUTTERFLY SLIPPERS ARE MEANT TO BE FREE!!  
love ya girl
me


 And it's good that I'm not angry,
I just need to get over,
I'm not angry, anymore
Cry when you cry,
run when you run,
love when you love,
represent the ashes
that you leave behind
~MB20~

"What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly"
~Lao Tze Tao~
~Butterflies are meant to be free~



Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850
In the space between moments
4 posted 2000-06-14 01:00 AM


Ooh, butterfly...I've gone through this myself...I am finally through with it for good though and happier than all can be with the new person in my life...you'll find the strength, I know it.  Beautiful and heartwrenching...a masterpiece indeed.  

 *Krista Knutson*

First say to yourself what you would be; and then do what you have to do. ~Epictetus~



JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
5 posted 2000-06-14 04:16 AM


Enjoyed reading this...the strength is definately building...James
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
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6 posted 2000-06-14 02:45 PM


Thank you all for your kind replies and for taking the time to read.  I appreciate it so very much!  J.M.~ I know  

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
7 posted 2000-06-14 04:04 PM


BDC... a wonderful piece, well written. I hope things work out.

 ------------------------
"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

"Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso

"You do not destroy an idea by killing people; you replace it with a better one". Edward Keating



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sea_of_okc
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since 1999-06-15
Posts 568
Oklahoma City, OK, USA
8 posted 2000-06-14 05:03 PM


Ahhhhh Butterflies you trying to make me tear up???? I stayed there for YEARS...
I know

And I hope you find the inner strength to do what you know you should do sooner than I managed to... staying in it will NOT fix it

Hugs,
  SS

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
9 posted 2000-06-14 05:11 PM


BDC,

...may spirits cause your soul to sing,
may a slight breeze lift up your wing,
may you learn to ever soar
may your heart hear laughter more...

do not be an enabler my dear...for you have so much more to live for than living for others...

good luck...

 Sunshine

~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow.
Helen Keller ~~~


Corinne
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167
state of confusion
10 posted 2000-06-14 06:31 PM


It's a tortuous kind of love, yes, the hardest of all to end.

Captured perfectly in your poem.

Peace, butterfly, fly.

Corinne

Lone Wolf
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since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA
11 posted 2000-06-14 07:39 PM


B.D.C.,

Oh my dear friend, this one tugs at my heart.  I know how you feel.  Wish I knew how to make it all better.  All you can do is live for yourself.  That is what is important.  This was a great one.  So strong and proud.  I love it.  

LW


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
12 posted 2000-06-14 10:38 PM



You are all so kind not only do you post kind remarks but then you go and care....I appreciate you all so much!  I'm not sure how to STOP being there though, I wish it were as easy as saying it and making it so...but it's never that easy is it.  Thanks for caring and for the advice  

Irie
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since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493
Washington State
13 posted 2000-06-14 10:44 PM


~*Irie poking him in the eye*~
and asking him:
"What's tha matter with you? You blind or something"

OH, Oops, Hi. Sorry couldn't help my self.
I get a little carried away with men and their issues!
I hope you have strength to kick him in the butt when
it's needed. And PRAY that he GETS it!
Well expressed BDC!   Hang in there


 ~Sheri

Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
14 posted 2000-06-15 09:12 AM


Beautiful heartwrenching poem Butterflies ... the strength is truly there within you.  Sometimes we just have to ask ourselves "If nothing changes, where do I see myself 6 months from now? 1 year from now? 5 years from now? 10 years from now?".  Answer each one honestly from within, and see where your heart leads you. Take care Butterflies,

Best wishes,
/Kit

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
15 posted 2000-06-16 08:33 PM


That strength will come and you will feel the better for it. A lot of good points made in this poem. No one likes to be used. Very well done poem, very pointed.
Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
16 posted 2000-06-17 12:03 PM



Irie....***handing you a BIG stick***...lol   thank you for reading and for the smile!

Kit* I was just looking in my year book and seeing what my goal was 10 years from then...boy was I off on that one!! Thank you for the heartfelt advice, I know what I want and where I would like to be...the question is how do I get there without hurting anyone....thank you for reading!

ethome* Thank you for your comments and for reading they are very much appreciated~

X Angel
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since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
Oregon
17 posted 2000-06-19 08:54 PM


GRRR this I can relate to so well!
Great poem! Intense feelings, and once and for all QUIT SAYING YES! *wink* LOL

~Heather

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733
Michigan
18 posted 2000-06-19 09:00 PM



Heather* Yes Mam    ...lol Thanks for reading~

Jan
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 114

19 posted 2000-06-19 09:18 PM


Been there (a couple of times)!  Your writing is excellent.  Wonderful poem.
Eskendale
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since 2000-06-16
Posts 17

20 posted 2000-06-19 09:54 PM


Hypocrisy... such a sadness

But even sadness can bring happiness through friendship, no? Just look at the beauty of a poem that shows life's intimate secrets, and so many hearts should be touched... allowing each other to comfort each other.

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
21 posted 2000-09-27 05:14 PM


I will "FOREVER" love you!!!
susanbartee
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since 2000-08-15
Posts 119
Channelview, TX USA
22 posted 2000-10-06 04:39 PM


I know how hard it can be myself.  I'm trying so hard to let completely go and can't seem too.  Just when we think we are there, weakness of the heart sets in again.  I just now found this beautiful poem; sorry so late.  Great as always.
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