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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Sarah As she kissed me goodbye, her long limbed potential struck me for the first time in the swinging of bare arms and the too-short purple dress. She’s the new kid at school, can’t call her baby anymore. I watched as I walked away, tears stinging, then she turned and pointed at a girl with a hula-hoop, her hands moving clock-wise, and I realized she’ll be fine. © 2000 Corinne Bailey [This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 06-13-2000).] |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow, what a consise picture you paint...but it says so much...long limbed potential...yep yep yep, can almost hear the sigh...and see the smile in the end..great job |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Corinne, this one is too deep for me... I think I get it, but maybe not... The anxieties of an elder (are you a school teacher by the way?) when a new kid joins the school, whether 'Sarah' here will be able to get together with other kids etc... are being portrayed... But I also see the comparison of Sarah to a new phase of life in the character of the poem, that (she) tentatively starts up worried whether things will be alright or not... Forgive me if I am blowing my top here, but please explain if I am wrong... Thanks. Regards, sudhir |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Corinne, a lovely poem. wonderful. I hope her first day of school went well. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. "Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Piccaso "You do not destroy an idea by killing people; you replace it with a better one". Edward Keating Pablo Picasso ----- |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Corinne, what a lovely reminder of a child's first day at a new and different school. Your phrasing is something I recall so well...where DID all of that lankiness come from? Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Corinne, what a lovely reminder of a child's first day at a new and different school. Your phrasing is something I recall so well...where DID all of that lankiness come from? Sunshine ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Corinne this was so vivid to me. i could almost see the events of this playing in my mind. great poem, very realistic poem! take care. amy  p.s. you penned your expressions beautifully as well. "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends." "Fate exists but it can only take you so far, Because once you're there It's up to you to make it happen." |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A lovely picture you've painted here Corinne ... what a touching portrayal! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
It seems each day they take another step away from your arms. Hopefully, in doing so, she will take a step closer to your wisdom. A moment well captured. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Many thanks, Corazon, Brian, Sunshine, Aimster Kit and Trew. Sudhir, Sarah is my daughter and was at school for the fist time, and in a flash I realized how she was changing before my eyes. Corinne |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thanks Corinne for sharing that info. Best wishes to Sarah and to you Corinne. Many regards too... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is great, Corinne. That is a very scary event. We all know that every child except ours is a monster!!!!  The poem, and I'm sure, your daughter are precious. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corinne~ What a sweet memory you've stored away for recall. Wonderful visions presented here, little Mommy. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
Beautifully portrayed, Corinne. I remember those times so clearly, and the tears came, as well. Yes, Corinne. She'll be fine. They do tend do grow up on us. Their hair grows, too. Rick |
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