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Alwye
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In the space between moments

0 posted 2000-06-12 11:57 PM


Ghostly raindrops darkly glimmer
With the haze of yesterday
Fallen eyes cast to the shadows
Within the tempest lay.

Possessed by the trembling skies
The radiance of life does shiver
And raped of peaceful innocence
The breath of our Heaven quivers.

Dying whimpers sigh painfully
Upon the voices of our children
Even angels can't hear their pleas
Above the soulless din.  

Our spirits fall in silver shards
Among the casualties of hate
Ruthless minds now reign in power
And disregard all fate.

A distant reverie once shimmered
Beyond the famine of our dreams
But one cannot hear words of hope
When a dying world does scream.

Fallen eyes must gently rise
And search blackness for the light
For only when we clear our souls
Can love overpower endless night.





 *Krista Knutson*

"Thought is real, physical is the illusion..." Albert from ~What Dreams May Come~



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JulieAnn
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Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!
1 posted 2000-06-13 12:09 PM


sounds as if this something you feel strongly about...i too ache for the sadnes in our world....you caould have said it better!!  
JulieAnn
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Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!
2 posted 2000-06-13 12:10 PM


I could n't have said it better...nice work!!
Dusk Treader
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3 posted 2000-06-13 12:31 PM


This exudes darkness from every vivid line.  I think I understand this one, even with my lackluster interpretation skills, the decay of society, the raping of the earth, selfish leaders... The world isn't kind... (I'm probably totally wrong, LOL) Loved the last lines.

"For only when we clear our souls
Can love overpower endless night."


 Abrahm Simons

"In a moment lies eternity
And in a kiss resides forever" - Krista Knutson my bestest friend!

Dawn Eclipse
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The Horsehead Nebula
4 posted 2000-06-13 04:10 PM


Krista~

That was a great poem.  Very different from the ones you usually write though.  I enjoyed this a lot!  

 "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying."
Harry Anderson, "Night Court"

*Cassandra Roseen*

Kit McCallum
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5 posted 2000-06-13 04:41 PM


Incredibly moving Krista!  A subject very close to my heart and you expressed this so vividly ... well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

sea_of_okc
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6 posted 2000-06-13 05:05 PM


Excellent and insightful poem Krista!
I enjoyed and agree completely.

brian madden
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7 posted 2000-06-13 06:51 PM


Possessed by the trembling skies
The radiance of life does shiver
And raped of peaceful innocence
The breath of our Heaven quivers

Our spirits fall in silver shards
Among the casualties of hate
Ruthless minds now reign in power
And disregard all fate.

A distant reverie once shimmered
Beyond the famine of our dreams
But one cannot hear words of hope
When a dying world does scream.

Dark, tragic, powerful yet hopeful
the last verse is beautiful, a blinging ray of hope in the dark. wonderful poem.

Fallen eyes must gently rise
And search blackness for the light
For only when we clear our souls
Can love overpower endless night.


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"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

"Art is a lie which makes us realise the truth." Pablo Picasso

"You do not destroy an idea by killing people; you replace it with a better one". Edward Keating



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Alwye
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In the space between moments
8 posted 2000-06-13 10:49 PM


Thank you all so much, I am deeply moved by your kindness.  

 *Krista Knutson*

"Thought is real, physical is the illusion..." Albert from ~What Dreams May Come~



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