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Mike
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0 posted 2000-06-12 10:39 PM


Drifting through waveless, tideless, Luna's light,
Unbroken, solemn silence of the night,
Brooding over each living thing,
Hushing even incessant cicada's wing,
Until the calm of perfect stillness reigns,
Ensconced in chill as darkness wanes.
Confronted by no mortal being,
Consciousness of companionship unseeing,
Standing in the echo of silent spasm,
Staring blankly, hopelessly over deserted chasm,
Sterile features of uninhabited lair,
Carry me lower, lower, to numbing despair.


[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 06-12-2000).]

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poetFemmeFatale
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1 posted 2000-06-12 11:47 PM


Oh my ....you sure are beautiful when you're low.   This made me feel completely and utterly empty...very powerful and moving piece.  Yes, one word, Empty.  
Mike
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2 posted 2000-06-13 09:33 AM


I appreciate your taking the time to respond Ms. Fetale.
Kit McCallum
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3 posted 2000-06-13 10:59 AM


Wow Mike!  Such powerful emotion and imagery here ... left me feeling almost weak!  VERY well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 06-13-2000).]

wayoutwalt
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4 posted 2000-06-13 11:02 AM


good as usual mike. i love your variety
Nan
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5 posted 2000-06-14 08:05 PM


Such intensity, my friend - The work is awesome, of course - I hope all is well??

Here's a rose for you in case you need it...


Denise
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6 posted 2000-06-14 10:22 PM


I have felt like that on more than one occassion. Hope all is well. Wonderful writing.

Denise

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