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Corinne
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0 posted 2000-06-12 12:15 PM



Simple View of Life

Emphasis placed on minimalism,
To be rulers of all we influence,
Like trying to hold back high tide,
Yet still we are compelled to try.

All these ironies will play out,
If somewhat predictably,
Choices thrown in our wake,
Either never enough, or too many.

A child playing a board game,
May grasp rules in black and white,
Or envision layers we cannot see,
In his evolving mind’s complexity.

The child discerns only simplicity,
We call on those all but lost memories,
Summers meant no responsibilities,
A Nap was boredom, not a luxury.

Now we measure life in milestones,
Mortgages and collectibles,
A sense that the original recipe
Got lost somewhere along the way.

© 2000 Corinne Bailey

© Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-06-12 12:33 PM


The child discerns only simplicity,
We call on those all but lost memories,
Summers meant no responsibilities,
A Nap was boredom, not a luxury.

Now we measure life in milestones,
Mortgages and collectibles,
A sense that the original recipe
Got lost somewhere along the way.
-------------

so true so true
words of wisdom C,
"out of the mouths of babes"
"thru the eyes of a child"
there is a need in us all to hold on to that innocence that "life" and "living" seems to take away in time
this VERY COOL poem of yours reminds me of an old favorite song>>>>>

~Before The Deluge~

Some of them were dreamers, some of them were fools
Who were making plans and thinking of the future
With the energy of the innocent, they were gathering the tools
They would need to make their journey back to nature

While the sand slipped through the opening
And their hands reached for the golden ring
With their hearts they turned to each other's hearts for refuge
In the troubled years that came before the deluge

Some of them new pleasure, some of them knew pain
And for some of them it was only the moment that mattered
And on the brave and crazy wings of youth
They went flying around in the rain
And their feathers once so fine grew torn and tattered

And in the end, they traded their tired wings
For the resignation that living brings
And exchanged love's bright and fragile glow for the glitter and the rouge
And in the moment they were swept before the deluge.

Jackson Browne
Late for the Sky


* dont ya just love cut and paste *smile*
thanks for reminding me of this song
Im gonna go listen to it  
later wise poet gator
jm





brian madden
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2 posted 2000-06-12 02:40 PM


All these ironies will play out,
If somewhat predictably,
Choices thrown in our wake,
Either never enough, or too many.

A child playing a board game,
May grasp rules in black and white,
Or envision layers we cannot see,
In his evolving mind’s complexity.

Now we measure life in milestones,
Mortgages and collectibles,
A sense that the original recipe
Got lost somewhere along the way.

I envy the innocence and wisdom of children,
I think we should nurture our inner child instead of suppressing it.  an excellent poem and a reminder of how serious us adults have become and how to concerned with living to enjoy it.



 ------------------------
"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

manic street preachers
"Culture Alienation Borebom and Despair"

"I know I believe in nothing but it is my nothing" -faster MSP

"And you see, I kind of shiver to conformity
Did you see, the way I cower to authority, you see
And my life, it's a series of compromises anyway
It's a sham, and I'm conditioned to accept it all, you see" six by Paul Draper.

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Corinne
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3 posted 2000-06-12 04:26 PM


Thank you, Janet Marie, I must track down that song, what cd is it on (almost typed Album, now that would have dated me, yes???)
thanks for your sweet comments.

Thank you, Brian, having kids is a constant reminder of the contrast.

Corinne

RAM
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4 posted 2000-06-12 04:34 PM


this is simply a wonderful reminder, Corinne.  Thank you.
Rick
p.s.   ummmm  scroll up and see that Janet includes the name of the al----er---CD.  LOL
Late for the Sky.  So, that slip of referencing album would have dated you, for sure.  But, just imagine how much it would date ME if I revealed that I remember WHY they were referred to as albums.

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2000-06-12 05:31 PM


LOL at C, and Ram...
oh what the heck...
we dinosaurs gotta stick together LOL

hey..I have owned this one by Jackson on
8 track, vinyl, cassette and cd..LOL
and had a few singles off of it on 45's..
LOL
remember the little plastic yellow 45
adapters LOL
oh man we're old   LOL
NOT!!
anyway, Ram is right..
Its From "Late for the Sky" and it is Jacksons best piece of work in my opinion...
if your a fan at all you will love it.
The lyrics are amazing.
heres the site where you can see all his lyrics, lots of good poetic inspiration.
Can ya tell I'm a JB addict LOL
http://www.empirezine.com/spotlight/jackson/jackson1.htm

later OLD-poet-gators  
jm

Corinne
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6 posted 2000-06-12 06:17 PM


Thanks RAM and Janet, not only am I old , but I guess I'm blind too!

Yeah, I recall those adapters, Janet Marie! But, I don't remember why they called them albums, RAM! (oh, maybe my memory is goin' too!)

Corinne

Skyfyre
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7 posted 2000-06-12 06:34 PM


Truth dances lightly in your verse, Corrine -- even unfortunate truth.  This poem ended in a nearly-audible sigh -- or maybe that was just me.

Well spoken.

--Kess


 YOUR LIFE IS A TEST

It is only a test ...

If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions!


Parker
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8 posted 2000-06-12 07:31 PM


Because we didn't care, life just seem to take forever to happen. Now we blink and ten years are gone........

I'm going to keep my eye's open with tooth picks, see if that helps....  

Parker

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9 posted 2000-06-12 08:07 PM


It is a dilemma, Corrine. We have the simplicity and innocence of youth and then, as we grow older, we want other things, which all come with responsibilities and then, after we have accumulated the other things and are buried under the responsibilities they bring, we wish for the simplicity of youth. hehe. I'm rambling here. Anyway, your poem made me think and that's what its all about, isn't it?  
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10 posted 2000-06-12 08:35 PM


Corinne~
Indubitably !

Enjoyed the thoughts of wisdom.
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Denise
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11 posted 2000-06-12 08:43 PM


This is wonderful, Corinne! I enjoyed this immensley!  

Denise

Corinne
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12 posted 2000-06-12 11:54 PM


Thank you for your comments, skyfyre, Park, Balladeer, Marge and Denise!  

Yes, Balladeer, the thoughts that run through my head exactly!


Corinne

Sudhir Iyer
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13 posted 2000-06-13 07:17 AM


Wiser words have not come forth in a better way than this, Corinne...
-------
Now we measure life in milestones,
Mortgages and collectibles,
A sense that the original recipe
Got lost somewhere along the way.
-------

When we were little children,
Only fear of gettinging burnt in the sun,
Now that we get older brethren,
All we fear is getting burnt by the fun!!!

The body has weakened so has the heart,
A bit of fun would make us miss a beat,
All we ponder is about beauty and serious work of art,
Albeit to see fun in the sun, is too much heat....

.....

Many regards, sudhir

 My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out
I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt
All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself,
Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright
My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor
Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore
Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night,
Still there are the questions, no answers in sight
Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight,
Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright
Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor,
Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door...
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange
You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange

~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream)

wayoutwalt
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14 posted 2000-06-13 08:20 AM


but the alien in the box is worth 400 dollars i sold mine out of the box 125 but hehe bought it at a garage sale for 3 bucks so yuh i well um love your poem and can relate
Kit McCallum
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15 posted 2000-06-13 12:18 PM


Oh if life were returned to simplicity Corinne ... what wonderful pondering your poem has brought to mind.  I find I crave "the old days" too often, and yet ... some day, down the road a'ways, these too will be the "old days" ... sigh ... wonderful expression and thoughts Corrine.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Corinne
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16 posted 2000-06-13 12:29 PM


Thank you, Sudhir, I was just thinking about that yesterday - took my kids swimming at the local lake, a teen age girl was basking in the sun while I donned my hat and searched for shade.  How things change.

Thank you, Walt, but I know you're still a kid at heart!

Corinne

RAM
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17 posted 2000-06-14 09:54 AM


blind maybe, Core.    Old?  NO WAY.  Cuz, if you are, what about me?   LOL

oh what the heck, I'll reveal the fact that I remember listening to 78 rpm records, and that they were stored in ACTUAL albums, one disk to each sleeve in the album.  The reference to "album" stuck, even when the 33 1/3 LPs came out.

meanwhile, speaking of Jackson Browne references to a Simple View of Life.  That was touched on in Our Lady of the Well, too.

Corinne
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18 posted 2000-06-14 10:38 AM


Gee, they made records in 78 rpms???

heheh.

Corinne

RAM
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19 posted 2000-06-14 05:35 PM


hmmmmm   claiming to have never heard of 78s, eh, Core?  Well, I certainly won't tell anyone any different.  

Rick
p.s.   let's get your poem back up top

ethome
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20 posted 2000-06-14 07:33 PM


You are so right the original recipe got lost somewhere along the way. Write for the reader I always say. You have just displayed a fine talent for doing that.
Cerenity
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21 posted 2000-06-15 08:04 PM


Hi Corinne,

This is simply awesome, so full of the truth, thank you for sharing this I loved it.

Love,  Cerenity

Corinne
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22 posted 2000-06-16 11:09 AM


Thank you, Ram, Ethome and Serenity.

Corinne

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