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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Okay.... I throw it all away. Crumpled paper, in the fire. (Pretty, when the edges burn.) What food is ashes word expired? What good is there, when all, begone? What good to tarry, (Tarry on...) someone please, next note of song.. Assure me, I'm not written wrong. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 06-12-2000).] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
You aren't written wrong, Serenity. Very well done. Elizabeth I'm grabbing my hat and coat I'm leaving the cat a note Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town! |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
This one caught my attention.... hidden depth in its subtleties... Nicely done. Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP "Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
I think we all hit a point where we look at our words and wonder if this is right, am I heading in the right direction. And as simply a reader of your poetry you are writting perfectly right. another wonderful poem. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. manic street preachers "Culture Alienation Borebom and Despair" "I know I believe in nothing but it is my nothing" -faster MSP "And you see, I kind of shiver to conformity Did you see, the way I cower to authority, you see And my life, it's a series of compromises anyway It's a sham, and I'm conditioned to accept it all, you see" six by Paul Draper. ----- |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'll write you the next note, the next verse-- of a new song .. I'll write you a rhyme, a lyric-- to carry you along for as long as you bleed in your poetry you shall not ever be written wrong. forgive me, its late and sleep cost extra who can sleep with this ache  or is it an itch ... hmmmmmm me thinks its both you know!!! *kiss kiss* me geminian twin jm And it's good that I'm not angry, I just need to get over, I'm not angry, anymore Cry when you cry, run when you run, love when you love, represent the ashes that you leave behind ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
S'en, Trust in yourself, and no one else. You might turn out a liar inside, but at least you'll be consistent.  Peace to you and your wonderful craft. Keep it up.Mike |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
very good poem....and remember a poet is NEVER wrong!! Peace to you and yours.... Julie |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Would like to thank you all, but especially, I'd like to thank me squirrel--for his kindness as well as the title of this poem-- (re: last e mail, Mike) you are a gentle man. Love to all and grats again... [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 06-13-2000).] |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Surely, You know it's to good to throw... don't cha..? |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
i love this simple peciouse piece, i used to have a fire place, and lovey they burn forever a smoke withered, your words are like mine not to be conseded, but i really like them, i can relate, thank you for sharing, kindly, redheart angrybraids |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
oh this was so cool wanted to say so i really liked it [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 06-13-2000).] |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
i like this one. i had to read it a lot to finally see it, but i get it now. very smooth and subtle. Ashes are the food of the world. there's no better fertilizer. and don't doubt your talent, because it's very evident here. ---------------------- if it looks good, you'll see it. if it sounds good, you'll hear it. if it's marketed right, you'll buy it. but if it's real, you'll feel it. -Kid Rock ---------------------- "You are not special. You are not a brilliant and unique snowflake. You are part of the same decaying organic matter as everyone else. We are all part of the same compost heap. We are the all-singing, all-dancing crap of the world." -Tyler Durden "On a long enough timeline, the survival rate for everyone is zero." -Tyler Durden We all got somethin' to atone for. -Ethan Halo |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thanx for replying to my one syllable poem...am here to return the favor.... can identify with this post very well...often feel the same way myself...sometimes, i wonder why i bother to carry on writing...im not good with words...dont know much about what makes poetry work and i just want to give up cos my words seem so false and fake and makes me want to puke... this reminds me of my darker moments in poetry...thanx for reminding me that i am not ALONE in feeling this way... regards |
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