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Alwye
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In the space between moments

0 posted 2000-06-11 11:49 PM


Jupiter's tears streak the night
In a bloody flash of anguish
Running, streaming, flying
Upon the disarrayed cloak
Of tortured night.

Moon ribbons weep silently
Through waves of glittered space
Falling, drifting, mourning
Weaving through pale apparitions
Of whispered sunlight.

The tender shine of Earth
Lays shadowed within your soul
Fading, quieting, withering
As among the clouds of thought
Your darkness screams.

The lips of angels beckon
With the rosy breath of forgiveness
Flitting, dancing, singing
Through the luminescent showers
Of a diamond eternity.

Let Jupiter's tears slide away
Upon the silver comet's haze
Running, streaming, flying
Through your dust enswathed reverie
And into crystal starlight.
  

Cassers, I've been thinking about you a lot sweetie girl.  It appears to me as if the darkness is closing in on you.  And I can't bear to see that happen.  Please try and heed my words and fight it. You have the spirit, the power, and the love to do so.  I believe in you, always have, always will.



 *Krista Knutson*

"Thought is real, physical is the illusion..." Albert from ~What Dreams May Come~



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Dusk Treader
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1 posted 2000-06-12 12:00 PM


Wow wow wow!  And wow again!  That was quite the ride you took me for.  Such a clear, vision, beautifully portrayed.  I loved lines like "Upon the disarrayed cloak
Of tortured night.", "Through waves of glittered space", and "diamond eternity."  Love this poem!    Definetly a beautiful poem for a beautiful person, I love ya Cassers!  I believe in your strength to overcome whatever may beset you my NINJA friend.


 Abrahm Simons

"In a moment lies eternity
And in a kiss resides forever" - Krista Knutson my bestest friend!

Dark Angel
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2 posted 2000-06-12 12:08 PM


Oh Krista, Wow! this is great, the imagery is
fantastic. Loved it hon!  

 Je t'aime plus qu'hier et moins que demain."
I love you more than yesterday and less than tomorrow
(unkown)



brian madden
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3 posted 2000-06-12 06:31 PM


wow a fantastic and dark poem, send my regards to Cassers. I hope she (?) finds the light. an excellent poem, powerful rich imagery.

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"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

manic street preachers
"Culture Alienation Borebom and Despair"

"I know I believe in nothing but it is my nothing" -faster MSP

"And you see, I kind of shiver to conformity
Did you see, the way I cower to authority, you see
And my life, it's a series of compromises anyway
It's a sham, and I'm conditioned to accept it all, you see" six by Paul Draper.

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Alwye
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In the space between moments
4 posted 2000-06-12 09:24 PM


Dusk- Thank you so much my dear, I appreciate it greatly.  

Dark Angel- Thank ya hon!

brian- thank you so much!  


 *Krista Knutson*

"Thought is real, physical is the illusion..." Albert from ~What Dreams May Come~



Dawn Eclipse
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The Horsehead Nebula
5 posted 2000-06-13 04:15 PM


*Near tears*  I don't know what to say Krissa... It was a beautiful poem...  and you used space!!!!!  Yay for space!!!!    

Thanks for writing this.  It means a lot to me, a lot more than you will ever know.  Only in my darkness can I truly see the light, and you are shinning extremely bright.     Abe, you, and Steve have been my strength, even if you don't know it.  Thank you so much.

 "Even a fool knows you can't touch the stars, but it doesn't stop a wise man from trying."
Harry Anderson, "Night Court"

*Cassandra Roseen*

Kit McCallum
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6 posted 2000-06-13 04:46 PM


So visual and picturesque Krista ... truly incredible imagery.  Stunning verse, and a wonderful inspiration to your friend, Cassandra.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Aimster
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Charlotte, NC
7 posted 2000-06-13 05:05 PM


Krista~
this was breathtaking. the sheer
beauty of this blew me away and has
left me speechless. excellent imagery,
stunning emotion, flawless almost in
everything that makes a poem awesome to
me. and for this i give you a double
awesome!  

 "Don't be dismayed at goodbyes. A farewell is before you can meet again. And meeting again after a moment or a lifetime is certain for those who are friends."

"Fate exists but it can only take you so far,
Because once you're there
It's up to you to make it happen."




Nate Dogg
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Georgia, Fulton
8 posted 2000-06-13 05:25 PM


This is a great and powerful piece!
Mike
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9 posted 2000-06-13 06:37 PM


Enjoyed.  Nicely written.
Alwye
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In the space between moments
10 posted 2000-06-13 10:55 PM


Cassers- I'm glad you enjoyed my humble offer.  I love ya more than anything and you too have been my light when darkness falls.  Fly with the stars my friend....for it is your destiny.  

Kit- Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed.  

Aimster- A double awesome eh!  well thank you a lot!  

Nate- thank you!

Mike- I thank you also!


 *Krista Knutson*

"Thought is real, physical is the illusion..." Albert from ~What Dreams May Come~



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