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The Mask
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The Mask |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho 
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The Mask We wear the mask of saints while committing grievous sins and then doing nothing to save our selves we wonder why the state we’re in preaching the ideals of glory then backing down when our bluff is called promising friends to give our help standing idle when they begin to fall..... a single death is a tragedy the rest are simply statistic we claw our way in to the life raft whilst the drowning masses go empty after... all we in fact are the great ominous majority who voice first our statistics coupled with our opinions so you know it is not us to blame you just keep your eyes on us when the future melts to a mystique chronic music of a falling out & the descent of radio-active debris while the white rain settles on a mutated living. If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley) |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW... We wear the mask of saints while committing grievous sins and then doing nothing to save our selves we wonder why the state we’re in preaching the ideals of glory a single death is a tragedy the rest are simply statistic we claw our way in to the life raft whilst the drowning masses go empty after... the future melts to a mystique chronic music of a falling out & the descent of radio-active debris while the white rain settles on a mutated living. a very powerful poem on the sins, hyprocrisies and excesses of mankind. excellently written. ------------------------ "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. manic street preachers "Culture Alienation Borebom and Despair" "I know I believe in nothing but it is my nothing" -faster MSP "And you see, I kind of shiver to conformity Did you see, the way I cower to authority, you see And my life, it's a series of compromises anyway It's a sham, and I'm conditioned to accept it all, you see" six by Paul Draper. ----- |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Wow,...this is some heavy writing. Well done expression....an eye opener for sure. Take care. *Peace. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Brian, Many thanks... it comes from to much TV in my youth maybe... of course today is not much different. Spitfire, Thanks for the reply, there's not many people who care to read things as such. It's easy to fix "kids" problems... quite another story when it come to adults, as bboog would say... huh..! |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
it sadened me because it is so true...nicely done..... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am being blown away t'nite... loved it all-- |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
JulieAnn, Caught your heart... thank you. Serenity, Thank you so much... by the way is it okay to say how sometimes you remind me of RJ... in that your a puzzle. Is that something that females do..? Or am I in an empty ball park wanderin'..? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
yeah...it's okay...if it makes you feel better, i am a puzzle to me too...i pray only that i have not lost a piece...smiles, and i thank you for what i take as compliment.... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
lucky, This is a great portrayal of man's hypocritical attitude... Nice work. Regards, sudhir My heart is pounding, my stomach's inside out I'm feeling kind-a-shaky, my mind is full of doubt All I ever think about, is fearing fear itself, Wish I could unscrew my head and put it on the shelf Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Don't know what I'm looking at, the lights are all too bright My brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor Sweep 'em up. Throw 'em away, don't want 'em anymore Clouds race across the sky, day turns into night, Still there are the questions, no answers in sight Everything is twisted, everything is oh so tight, Starin' out the window, everything is just too bright Brain's about to crumble, spill out on the floor, Wish I could unscrew my head, and kick it out the door... You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange You know I'm feeling kind-a....Strange ~ Strange ~ Joe Satriani (Flying in a Blue Dream) |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
serenity, Yeah...it's okay what..! and if it makes me feel better what.., I feel small you little scoundrel, and I know I'm sure a puzzle, at least to meself... Your such a stinker, and oh....., by the way, I don't think praying is necessary, you've lost no pieces...(smily, smily faces...) and you can believe that was a true compliment... your the bestest dearest. bestest wishes loves, lucky PS. Stinker..! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Man that mask discolors a lot phases of honesty. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Sudhir, Interesting bias attitude as to what direction things are coming from... I actually meant it to be quite open especially for the feminine, relating to women and characterized by and possessing qualities generally attributed to women... but your views are respected. It could be many men have bias hypocritical attitudes... I Thank you, I think..? |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
ethome, Sorry I missed you. Thanks so much for your reply. I can see there's not many who want to speak of it. Thanks for keeping to the point. Lucky |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"a single death is a tragedy the rest are simply statistic" What can I say, when you've said it all so well Lucky? All too true and expressed beautifully. It's a difficult subject this, but one that deserves attention. You've done this well! Best wishes, /Kit |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Kit, You little side door sneek. My fingers arn't fast enough for ya all's. So nice your regards, Bless bless... but I just have to go to bed, the sun's coming up and I don't want to melt. love love |
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