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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho 
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Solo again I type here alone within my thoughts yet I thirst crying these tears but there’s not an ear to hear of how I want to show this world my pain while so sorry saying I really should be on my way but now can't for the life of me sincerely tell you how or why I feel anymore or let any see in side my brain as there are so few who understand me and know my tears and no one enters my world no one sees these fears my world is wavy my ocean is rough on the surface yet beneath the waves are hidden torrents and dreams without purposes most times it looks smooth and crystal clear on the veneer all though boiling savagely beneath yes under stand I clear in deed the seas beneath these wings. If I could paint a portrait, of this life in which I've led, and somehow sketch a story, of the visions in my head, I'd start out with a canvas, stretched tightly in a frame, and in the bottom corner, I'd leave room to sign my name. (Michelle A. Bartley) |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lucky~ Well, it's about time you showed up, Mister ! I was ready to put out an APB on you !  A kind of a sad surfacing ... I feel the pain in this, my friend. I think you are the veneer you need to be - to dive to the depths you have. I have a true appreciation for your work, Dale. Love and *HUGS* my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Thanks Marge, you know your one of my hero's too. Plus I have been rather busy working with Rosemary on the sights. This piece came from a movie RJ was watching, "Beaches" it moved me so much that I just had to write of it. It's been my first writing in daz. Sending Love & prayers (Lucky) Dale |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Lucky Wonderful expression in this peice, I very much enjoyed it, please come often you are a very good poet my friend. Love, Cerenity |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Cerenity' Very nice, you sparked a sparse 'lil corner of my heart. Thank you. (lucky) Dale |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh the hidden torrents that run so deeply beneath the calm surface ... you've expressed this beautifully Lucky! Very well done, you touched me deeply with this one. Best wishes, /Kit |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Kit..! Your going to force me into buying a life preserver... I think I'm going to fall over the edge. Your a sweetheart. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
You certainly shine thru your words and you may be alone in your thoughts from time to time, but you certainly do not fly solo...seems there's a certain poet by the name of Rosemary by your side and when you two spread your wings, nothing can stand in your way |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Ruth, Thanks so much for the email, is always nice to hear from you. Sorry I didn't get back on your reply. We too haven't had the time to post lately. Rosemary's computer had a major crash and she spent 5 or so hours or the tele with @home and still wasn't able to get it fixed. After I realized what was needed I did it in 3 min. She even got out of bed to see... can you believe that..! Much Love, Dale |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Dale~ wonderful reading the hidden waves of you  Dale I love the way you write, it's so individual and always so expressive. Great read Tracie~< !signature--> Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 06-19-2000).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
As I read your work, I detect a rhythm, though not one confined to lines and meter, but more, an accentual cadence, if you will. It is I, feeling quite "lucky" to be allowed to indulge and live, for a moment, in the deepening of your words. Thank you. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"boiling savagely beneath yes..." Wow...am awed again...You be deep. |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
We are two spirits grown deep in moist underground emotional earth; as the roots of two strong trees intertwined within an alien soil. I remember when you wrote this first, about three years ago, when the movie "Beaches" meant so much to me. It tugged tears from my heart to see your re-write of that one. I like this version even better. I know that movie brought out such feelings from our own lives for each of us. You speak of an anguish which was yours long ago, sparked by that film, and I care. I just have to say this, my marvelous, and one-of-a-kind husband, but I believe your writing is completely unique. Even though I know I am biased in my love for you, I have spent nearly half a century reading, reading, reading... and have never found any writer like you. I consider myself an expert. Your pain always cuts me to the heart. And I am so blessed that you are so tender with mine. With oceans of love, I remain your most ardent fan, your wife Rosemary ~ < !signature--> The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. [This message has been edited by Rosemary J. Gwaltney (edited 06-20-2000).] |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Wonderful. A realy good read. After all, what is reality anyway? Nothin' but a collective hunch. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lucky, to read your words is like a search for a treasure that teases feeling...I love the way you write and I care much for you and that love of your life, Rosemary...hugs to you both. |
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