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Lone Wolf
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0 posted 2000-06-11 06:12 PM


My ship set sail on the ocean blue
It was supposed to take me to you
I can still feel the warm summer breeze
No one knew that later we'd freeze

Things started out carefree and fun
That day I basked under the sun
I saw a man of mystery and intrigue
Thought to myself he's not in my league

Something kept drawing me to his face
My heartbeat quickened just a trace
Eyes sparkled blue under hair of gold
I was surprised he could be so bold

In a moment he was standing in front of me
Then a kiss he gave for all to see
He took the breath from my throat
Think I will stay on this boat

We got to the port where you would wait
Unaware of the hand of fate
By then I belonged to another
He is so much more than just my lover

Sorry to leave you in this way
Standing on the beach near the bay
I hope these words comfort your tears
And that the tide washes away your fears



 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

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brian madden
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ireland
1 posted 2000-06-11 06:20 PM


Things started out carefree and fun
That day I basked under the sun
I saw a man of mystery and intrigue
Thought to myself he's not in my league

Something kept drawing me to his face
My heartbeat quickened just a trace
Eyes sparkled blue under hair of gold
I was surprised he could be so bold

Sometimes fate goes play a hand and some people were not meant to be together. I am gald that you found your perfect partner. really enjoyed this poem.

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"Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time".

Baltimore Grotto

"To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting."

E.E Cummings.

manic street preachers
"Culture Alienation Borebom and Despair"

"I know I believe in nothing but it is my nothing" -faster MSP

"And you see, I kind of shiver to conformity
Did you see, the way I cower to authority, you see
And my life, it's a series of compromises anyway
It's a sham, and I'm conditioned to accept it all, you see" six by Paul Draper.

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poetFemmeFatale
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2 posted 2000-06-11 06:35 PM


Oh OUCH....this was so heartfelt yet painful!  I tell you, I learned a long time ago to not tempt the hand of fate, or question her....she is far wiser than any of us will EVER be.  What will be will be.  And you're only kidding yourself if you think you can alter your fate.  I think our paths are already laid out for us, all we have to do is walk, and stay out of the weeds!      (chiggers you know!)
Lone Wolf
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3 posted 2000-06-11 07:47 PM


Brian,
Thank you, but it is only a poem.  Sort of  a story I guess.  Not true at all.  Was just thinking about how fate has already chosen our path and we cannot alter that.

Poet Femme,
Thanks.  I know that fate is wiser than I and already knows how things will go.  I agree with you 100% on fate having it all laid out already.  This just kind of came to me so I decided to write about it.  


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

kitkat
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4 posted 2000-06-11 08:43 PM


I enjoyed your poem whether it be fact or fiction. Fate has written our stories. As in your poem there held the fate of happiness for you and the fate of saddness for the other. Nicely done
SpitFire
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5 posted 2000-06-11 09:08 PM


~Oh LW,...you are getting so creative in your work these days.  Love to see all that you write.  Great story, great message.  Love this. Take care. *Peace.
Lone Wolf
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6 posted 2000-06-13 12:40 PM


Kitkat....Thank you!!  Yes, fate has already written those stories and regardless of what we say or do things will always work out as they should.  Well said!!

Spit Fire....Thank you very much my friend!!  I try to be creative.  It just kind of came to me the other day.  I love your writing also.  Take care.  


 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

First__Knight
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7 posted 2000-06-13 03:00 AM


Lovely poem in the writing....A bit painful for the one left standing....I suppose because I have been left standing on that port waiting for a woman like this.  And I hate to have an opposed view...but I would really hate to think that I have no control on what I become or where I go....leaving all to fate.  I think it a sad thing to say we have no real choice to decide.  I myself don't live by way of fate.... If I did I think I would simply do nothing....and let fate be what ever it would be in my life.  But I can tell you I would be a bum....but I choose not to do that.....and I continue to work to be what I desire...not what is left for me in fate.  We all have different views and that is what makes us all different....I don't know if anyone really knows the real answer......And does it really matter?  Just live for today because we are never promised a tomorrow.  Enjoyed the poem  

 It takes only a minute to get a crush on someone, an hour to like someone, a day to love someone, but it takes a lifetime to forget someone.


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8 posted 2000-06-13 05:38 AM


Hi Lone Wolf,

You know I love everything you write, however, I must agree with First_Knight on this issue. I do believe in fate to a certain extent, but fate can only take you so far. We must live each day for what it is.
Not that I am a very religious man, but even the Bible tells us that we aren't promised a tomorrow.
I don't want to start a phylisophical debate here just stating my point of view

Anyway, I did enjoy this poem, very much so.
And I would love to write another with you very soon

 All my love,
Jeffrey

I lie awake in a world filled with dreams,
but dreams can be so real when you don't know you're asleep


Kit McCallum
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9 posted 2000-06-13 02:53 PM


Written beautifully and such a twist at the end! But oh I'd hate to be that poor fellow left standing near the bay     Wonderful poem Lone Wolf!     

Best wishes,
/Kit

[This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 06-13-2000).]

amazon_lover
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10 posted 2000-06-13 03:07 PM


Hi LW
Good one I loved the twist...a poor man left stranded...It will be harsh in real life..This makes love a game of hide and seek.Funny yet interesting game. I pray there aren't many like this....

Sincerely
A_L

Nate Dogg
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11 posted 2000-06-13 05:07 PM


This is a great and sad piece.  

 Nathan

Lone Wolf
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12 posted 2000-06-14 10:54 PM


First_Night....Thanks for the read and comment.  We do have a choice, but that is what determines fate.  The choices set things in motion.  I guess I felt that if she were meant to be with the man on the port, then she would not have fell for the one on the ship.  I hope that makes sense.  Just an idea I had...nothing behind it really.  Yes, you really should live each day to the fullest.  Perhaps you are confusing fate with destiny.  Fate is what determines your destiny.  

Jeffrey....Thank you for the comment.  No, no debates necessary.  Inteeresting to read everyone's take on this.  Glad you enjoyed it.  I would love to write another with you as well!!  

Kit....Thanks.  Just thought it would be a different twist for a man to be left standing there instead of a woman.  Love that shocked look!!  LOL...

A_L....not a true story...just something I wrote.  Kind of came to me.  I hope there are not many like that either.  

Nate....Thank you....that was the point.  The sad part just kind of happened.



 Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

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