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In The Chorus
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In The Chorus |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Those high school sweetheart days we loved, we fit together hand and glove. We sang in sunsets spilling gold I can't believe the songs we wrote. We hid behind the graveyard fence your searching kiss was so intense and my hearbeat skipped and whirled, oh you were a good time girl. You mothered me just like a boy I smothered you just like a toy. We were young and living dreams happy with our destiny. In the heat we'd sing a toast to King and Taylor's lyric rotes, we sang two heart harmony and in the chorus our souls would meet. One on one a sculpture carved together we were modern art. A model for the world to see we'd sing of change with words of peace. We were clean and music deep just like moonlight on the sea. We lived the fairy tales of hope the brand new home the future wrote. We built great plans for future tasks working on the dreams to last. Those growing years we spent together we thought they'd go on forever. But the nature of the boy singing songs telling stories opened doors beyond the stage here tommorrow gone today. When the praises came to rest I tried to fight them with my best but the change from boy to man blankets over younger plans. The years upon your throbbing breast have stayed with me at heart no less. But I booked away to other spoils the freedom from our midnight oil. Now I sing the tavern shift a folksey rover with a gift. But there's a lost and unheard verse that can't explain our love and work So I play us but there's no you, just smoke filled rooms and jaundice booze. When it comes down to the truth there was no gamble in our youth. Swept away by rushing tides we filled the needs we craved inside. But changes flow from buried streams and surface in the thoughts we breed. So now it's over past the end In the chorus I hear a friend. We were young and living dreams happy with our destiny. In the heat we'd sing a toast to King and Taylor's lyric rotes. We sang two heart harmony and in the chorus our souls would meet. Celtrue2000@E3B1G9 |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
wow this is excellent ... the rhyme and flow are perfect... wonderful emotions and memories weaved in with the music. well written and much enjoyed jm And it's good that I'm not angry, I just need to get over, I'm not angry, anymore Cry when you cry, run when you run, love when you love, represent the ashes that you leave behind ~MB20~ "What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly" ~Lao Tze Tao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ This is liltingly lovely. And what a GREAT line this is - 'Now I sing the tavern shift a folksey rover with a gift' Wow ! I enjoyed your 'song'. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This was wonderful ETHome ... I loved the flow, the rhythm and the presentation of your sentiments ... beautifully done ... thanks for the memories! Best wishes, /Kit [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (edited 06-11-2000).] |
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Trew Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Ottawa, Canada |
ethome, The refrain did it for me. Especially: "We sang two heart harmony and in the chorus our souls would meet" Wow! That was just an incredible piece. Must go read it again... Trew. I have been to see the world. Tasted life at every turn. And all the time your face came back to haunt me. -Chris DeBurgh |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Bravo! (clapping Hands) encore! encore!  [This message has been edited by A Romantic Heart (edited 06-11-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Janet, Marge, Kit and A Romantic Heart for your kindness. |
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