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Silent soul Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 73tx,usa |
Lucky is what you think When you hear about this girl She has everything she could possibly want But yet does not go and flaunt it Is it the hurt she ahs inside That she can't possibly deny Her life is great! yeah it's true Then why everyday does she feel blue She ahs no more tears She'll end it all right here No one understands just how she feels It's a feeling she has that just says kill Would anyone miss her or even care? She thinks to herself no one would! And ends it all right here for good thanks 4 reading Silent |
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nando Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 87Vaxjo, Smaland, Sweden |
Welcome Silent... What a great poem you´ve written, it´s actually a little strange, because I wrote a poem sort of like this a while ago which I posted today in the forum "dark passion 1" Read it and see whether you agree... Other than that I think you write in a way that captures the reader and makes him/her think....You made me think anyway... Hope to hear from you soon again... -nando- Ask me how to live your life, and this to you I´ll say: make your choises true and wise, so that when tomorrow will arise, you´ll smile at yesterday... |
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nando Member
since 2000-06-09
Posts 87Vaxjo, Smaland, Sweden |
It´s called "the demon within" Forgot to tell you...  |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Silent Soul, this one you've shared is quite powerful and very expressive indeed. Coco |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Silent Soul. You've expressed such deep emotions in this verse, and very well ... please keep writing, and take care, for many will miss her and many will care! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Silent soul Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 73tx,usa |
Why thanks I didnt really think anyone would like it because I kinda of wrote it fast and didnt really think but I am glad ya'll like it at least people reply in this fourm they dont in this other web site I post poems. well thanks again bye 4 now Silent (just in case ne one cares I'm 14) |
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Lorraine Nisbet Member
since 2000-05-18
Posts 218Jersey City, NJ USA |
Silent Soul~ Great first post! Welcome to Passions!! A great poet is nothing more....than a discovered amateur |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Silent soul, Welcome to passions, powerful and sad poem all in one, this person WOULD be MISSED, it is wonderful to see the teens writting and expressing them selves through peotry, I am very happy to see you here and look forward to more of your work. Love, Cerenity |
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Silent soul Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 73tx,usa |
Thanks everyone for replying writing stuff helps me express myself i guess with out actually doin somtetihn to myself and dont worry the poems not based on anything true really but its how i feel newayz thanks for the replys keep them comin I'll post another later bye 4 now Silent |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Silent Soul, Welcome to Passions!! Very deep poem for your entrance to our group. Just keep writing and work out all those negative feelings on paper. It will help you, believe me. You will find many wonderful and caring people to befriend here in the Passions family. They will help you. Nice writing and looking forward to reading more of your work. Lone Wolf Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Silent soul Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 73tx,usa |
thanks all you guys for making me feel so welcomed and i appreciate it ok im gonna post two more so please read them there called "crystal ball" and " the hurt i try to hide" bye 4 now silent [This message has been edited by Silent soul (edited 06-11-2000).] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
 Welcome to Passions!! Keep writing, it's a wonderful way to work through the feelings that you have inside Thank you for sharing this and remember that there are always people who care if you stop to look |
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Silent soul Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 73tx,usa |
thanks for your reply Silent |
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Silent soul Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 73tx,usa |
so anyone else like this poem outta of all poems ive written this is my fave for some reason bye 4 now silent (more replys) |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
very dark an deep....it does indeed make you think....  great writing.....Julie :) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Welcome to passions Silent Soul, keep up the writing, it's as good a tonic as you can ever take for the soul. Kiss that girl for me I am going to miss her terribly because she is too precious. |
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